legend of krystal the story.

[trunks2585]

Damn I'm good at finding these things i swear. So first i found the spin off game now i find a story based off the game. it can be found in 'adultfanfiction.net' here's a direct link. http://games.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600085100 the site might ask you to vertify your age and all that before it lets you in, i've never tried hot linking to a story from there before. If you have to do it the long way, after you get past the age mumbo jumbo, go to the 'anime/games' tab, click on games, and at the new screen click on s-(whatever it was) and then look for starfox adventures, the story will be 'legend of krystal'

I havn't even read this yet, just reporting my discovery, i'll give a review and thoughts later.

[dandan]

gah, you beat me to it.

Well, I'll give a small review. It's not a best seller novel worth type of writing, but it's interesting. The author actually gave thought to make a background story for the fic rather than jumping straight into the smut -cue to ironic echo-. There may be some issues of giant blocks of text, but it's not as bad as some other stuff out there. Can't really remember much of how Fox and Krystal act in canon, but at least their interactions are interesting in the fic.

as for the actual porn, well I could say it goes down a bit to the silly part with some of the descriptions and the hard to picture situations of the opening scene in LoK... until I remember that LoK travels with Rule of Porn. I mean, those cocks would be hitting Krystal's lungs with every penetration, shouldn't be possible, but looks damn hot so it's okay.

The descriptions, as I said, are a bit silly at times, but the author wins points for taking the premise of the scene and making it very intense.

Hmmm, not sure how some may see this, but the author is writing a Krystal who doesn't like the idea of being raped, but wouldn't mind Fox doing the same things to her, and grows to like and pleasure the reptile near the end.

All in all, it's a pretty good start, and the author wins more points for giving PlayShapes the due recognition for having come with the original concept. The first chapter ends with the Airwing crashing, and there isn't a chapter 2 yet. Maybe if the people in charge of the project gives them a few ideas they may be encouraged to speed up chapter 2? Also to keep it closer to "canon", but that's all up to you guys

[trunks2585]

yeah only one chapter recapping the intro scene. The personalities don't really bother me much i think they are fairly accurate, personally i would have prefered krystal and fox to have gone at it a few times prior to the story, but that's what we can do with OUR story for the game. At least the author feels like we do, the outright rape scenes are a turnoff so she gives in, it's a reluctance to acceptiance thing.

I believe the author said this is their own interpitation of things and they weren't going to strictly follow the game storyline we are making so as not to ruin the full contents of the game.

[iKurby]

I like this a lot!

Very well written and I can't wait for the continuation.

[nebrose]

I like this a lot!

Very well written and I can't wait for the continuation.

hmm.... why do i have a feeling that the story is only going to continue if the game v0.3 comes out... probably just a bad gut feeling, but those are actually pretty reliable.

[dollspit]

Very well written and I can't wait for the continuation.

I'll refrain from quoting it out of common courtesy, but I felt some of the sex was kinda awkwardly written.

Also, I probably wouldn't have written it in past tense myself, since LoK visually plays as if you're a voyeur in the scene hiding in the bushes. A first person account would've been a bit more effective, I think.

Regardless, props to the author since the LoK story is somewhat difficult to realize in prose.

[OmegaXIII]

I'm another author on the same website and was rather envious to see someone else managed to beat me to the punch with their own tribute to "Legend of Krystal".

...Of course, my own erotic revision is currently being planned out and the opening chapter is incomplete, so my fellow author beat me by a country mile.

I am under the impression that the author, no1important, is somewhat inexperienced without another piece of writing on the internet (at least not under the same name) and there are some grammar errors and unnecessary ongoing sentences. Those oversized paragraphs encompassing the adult situations are an eyesore and could use some division between them. There are some small word choices which I would not have made, they just don't seem organic and push the reader away. I believe the opening chapter might have been awkward to some readers because of how it was approached. It can be quite difficult to describe events and he needed to shoehorn in certain information which was not present in the game. You need to come up with an answer to the major questions, such as my own curiosity as to "How did those ground troops jump up from the jungle floor" and "How in the blue hell can an arwing could keep going forward when the pilot was getting her throat fucked?!". There are too many casual readers out there who want answers and would not accept "it's porn, just go with it!".

I am actually hoping that the author does not become discouraged and continues working on the story. The overall performance is average to good, but there are some parts which impress me. The author quickly revealed that Krystal is an organic creature who can appreciate sex, as opposed to the exhausting and stereotypical princess character who is innocent and without shame. The opening dialogue between Fox and Krystal wagering how one was going to become the sex slave was deliciously ironic. He obviously understood how the game was rhetorical toward the player, allowing them to envision what Krystal might be processing her numerous encounters. I do not expect Krystal to become a complete whore, but rather someone who has must work to escape a situation and is prepared to do what is necessary. The author is planning to describe every one of the scenes present in version 0.2, so there should be more than enough to drive him on until the update.

[Untamed]

The Second Chapter is up.

No1Important has done a great job so far making a great story based on what happens in the game

If you are reading this, No1Important, I invite you to become a member in the forums (if you arent one already, hehe)

[SkullFox]

Hey there everyone. I just signed up to this site. I've also been doing Fanfiction for some time mostly on Fanfiction.net, but, I have also been working on a Legend of Krystal fic, for some time now. Since finding this site, I figured it might be appreciated here. Anyhow you can find it http://games.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600085350, here.

Appreciate what all the LOK Team is doing. Great Job guys

[OmegaXIII]

Ladies and Gentlemen, we have another one and it seems to have been uploaded with three chapters! I need to get back to work on my own and catch up!

http://games.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600085350

EDIT: Wow... I am a tremendous moron.

[Outonbail]

Impressive writing talent, I must say.

[SkullFox]

Hi guys. Posted another chapter. Couldn't really sleep with all the partying going on around here. I really do feel i should thank the guys here and the LOK team, and Playshapes. Since I started writing this piece my writer's block is gone...
Anyhow, here's chapter 4 in case anyone wants to give it a once over...peace...
http://games.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600085350&chapter=4

They call me......
The Footsteps in the Darkness....
SkullFox

[thehammer]

Epic.

[SkullFox]

So......I'd be here to actually let people know i have chapter 5 up. That is accept that at the moment, my computer went on a wild boat trip straight to hell...and that means the loss of some important files and data, and let's face it...my LOK story is gone now too. Which means i have to start over on chapter 5......again. So the next chapter may be a little held back. However, i have this weekend off and i'll be doing my damndest to get a new chapter 5 up...sorry if this sets me back a week or two on the update...

[SkullFox]

Yo everyone. Just got my stuff back online.
So for any that care here's chapter five... ^_^
http://games.adultfanfiction.net/story.php?no=600085350&chapter=5

[thehammer]

Brilliant.

[KrYpTeR]

that was really awesome, mad props...can't wait to read more! KEEP US UPDATED SKULLFOX!!

[SkullFox]

Thanks guys:D

[KrYpTeR]

just curious, whens chapter 6 out?

[SkullFox]

funny you should ask that question...^_^
LOK Chapter 6