legend of krystal the story.

[Outonbail]

I see the plot was a bit different. So...she is captured by the sharpclaws again? After escaping them? Or is she being lent to the sharplcaws for pleasure? Not sure what exactingly is going on in the plot.

[SkullFox]

Well no she was captured, she was actually turned over by Nina a chapter and a half ago LOL.

[Outonbail]

Well no she was captured, she was actually turned over by Nina a chapter and a half ago LOL.

Oops, missed a chapter.

After reading up on the rest I now understand the twist. Talk about challenging for our heroine. And Nina being a traitor, didn't see that one coming. I understand the theme of Krystal being used as a sex toy is half of the main plot (wouldn't LoK if it didn't), but to be partly critical, you understand I hope it isn't going to be dragged out for too long . Though I acknowledge, it wouldn't be a legendary tail if Krystal didn't have a mountain to conquer (or fuck in some cases) before she gets the happy ending, heh.

Once again, fantastic writing talent, Skullfox.

[Outonbail]

On a side note I'm still taking suggestions, this thing can go however we want it to LOL

Well again, I want a good ending still (Fox and Krystal happily ever after, of course).

I think it was mentioned there is a terrifying beast in the jungles right? I'd say terrifying is either Scale's Tyrannosaurus pet or something else you can make up. But either way I think its only appropriate Krystal has got to escape again but I wouldn't recommend she keep getting captured and to escape again. A repeat of this can get lame really quick. (not that your story is that, of course). Anyways, I remember she pleasures the big dinosaur in the game I think it would be cool if she manages to do that like she did in the flashgame, then tames the beast. Uh oh, Krystal now has her own pet! That is just a suggestion, of course.

At some point she needs to get an edge over Scales or the Wolf tribe, either way so she can, A) Free her people, or B) Get Fox his memories again. Either way, that will lead to the other goal eventually.

[[TxM]Fox]

Well again, I want a good ending still (Fox and Krystal happily ever after, of course).

agreed. i like the twist you gave it, i can only guess that she will somehow escape once more and somehow make her way back to Fox and somehow make him remember, and then they would somehow escape together.

but thats up to you to figure out. you're the author and a darn good one at that

[SFFan]

Just wondering if theres another chapter coming out and if so whats the estimate?

[dogman23]

these all make me happy show the lok pride guys lol cant wait for next chapters

[SkullFox]

I apologize for the lateness in responding to this guys i really do. I appreciate all of your support in the writing, and i promise to have another chapter up asap, right now i'm juggling some family, job, and writing issues though...so you can see why i've been short on my writing. The next chapter should be up however before next weekend i hope, if we're lucky i'll work on it later tonight and get it out there. Thanks again guys and keep up the awesome work LOK Team....

[Outonbail]

I apologize for the lateness in responding to this guys i really do. I appreciate all of your support in the writing, and i promise to have another chapter up asap, right now i'm juggling some family, job, and writing issues though...so you can see why i've been short on my writing. The next chapter should be up however before next weekend i hope, if we're lucky i'll work on it later tonight and get it out there. Thanks again guys and keep up the awesome work LOK Team....

No prob man. No pressure.

[SFFan]

i just read another very good story, alot like this one kinda only in Fox's POV

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6886850/1/S ... n_Prisoner

BTW hows that story coming skullfox?

[Outonbail]

Hope we see a chapter soon now.

[[TxM]Fox]

man i hope its updated soon

[SkullFox]

Hey everyone I'd like to officially apologize for my lack of writing recently, but, on a note...I have been stricken not only with a hideous case of writer's block, but, have gone through an occupational change which is taking some getting use to, and once i get used to my new work hours and work something out I promise to get the last few chapters up and finsished...

[Outonbail]

Hey everyone I'd like to officially apologize for my lack of writing recently, but, on a note...I have been stricken not only with a hideous case of writer's block, but, have gone through an occupational change which is taking some getting use to, and once i get used to my new work hours and work something out I promise to get the last few chapters up and finsished...

Sounds good. I understand writers block is often a symptom of stress, especially when due to a major job change.

I think basically the idea I have in mind for the story is to start changing Krystal's situation from slave, to free, to legitimate threat against her enemies. Getting Fox his memory back is going to be important, and I think would require Krystal learning a bit more about her telepathy to be able to do it. Freeing her people would be nice. I still think she should be able to tame that T-Rex (after giving that poor fella a "release," ahem, and also using some telepathy to command it) out there as a nice way of scaring the piss out of the tyrant, and giving the wolf tribe Alpha an incentive to instate her as a warrior. If you like, for sake of consistency in the final climax, Krystal can experience a final test of her sexual endurance versus some tentacle monster the tyrant thinks would defeat Krystal, with a comical twist is she outlasts the monster, much to it and the tyrant's terror, lol.

[SkullFox]

my friend OutonBail, that was.........strangely specific. To be honest, I have been thinking about the Redeye thing, I just don't really care for the idea of that much weirdness. However, if it's what the readers would like I can put that in there. I'll have the chapter ready here in the next week, possibly next Sunday. I really do like your style, Out, seems you and are were actually mostly thinking on the same wavelength for the most part; either way it's always good to see people so interested in reading my work...
Thanks for all the support guys
And a big thanks to the LOK Team and Playshapes for the inspiration

[Outonbail]

my friend OutonBail, that was.........strangely specific. To be honest, I have been thinking about the Redeye thing, I just don't really care for the idea of that much weirdness. However, if it's what the readers would like I can put that in there. I'll have the chapter ready here in the next week, possibly next Sunday. I really do like your style, Out, seems you and are were actually mostly thinking on the same wavelength for the most part; either way it's always good to see people so interested in reading my work...
Thanks for all the support guys
And a big thanks to the LOK Team and Playshapes for the inspiration

Well you said you had writers block despite all our ideas. So I'm just throwing more and more out there.

[Outonbail]

On that note if you really want weird detailed, Christopher Walken lands on the planet and with a swift and fluid dual pistol katta, wipes out both the Wolf and the Sharpclaw tribes and brings Fox and Krystal back home for tea, plus some very very awkward dialogue from Christopher Walken.

[MR L]

I would like to say good job on creating a good story so far and I can't wait for the next chapter. Really all I could ask for is a happy ending for fox and Krystal (with foxes memory back of course) and also including the redeye a bit more (somebody mentioned taming it ) would be really amazing.

[Yawg]

"This watch was on Fox's wrist when he was shot down over Hanoi. He was captured and put in a Saurian prison camp. He knew that if the geckks ever saw the watch, they'd confiscate it--take it away. The way your boyfriend looked at it, this watch was your birthday present. He'd be damned if any scaleskin's gonna put their skimy green hands on his girl's gift. So, he hid it, in one place he knew he could hide something: his ass. Five long years he wore this watch . . . up his ass. Then, he died of dysentery, he give me the watch. I hid this uncomfortable hunk of metal up my ass two years. Then, after seven years, I was sent home to my family. And now, little lady, I give the watch to you."

[Outonbail]

"This watch was on Fox's wrist when he was shot down over Hanoi. He was captured and put in a Saurian prison camp. He knew that if the geckks ever saw the watch, they'd confiscate it--take it away. The way your boyfriend looked at it, this watch was your birthday present. He'd be damned if any scaleskin's gonna put their skimy green hands on his girl's gift. So, he hid it, in one place he knew he could hide something: his ass. Five long years he wore this watch . . . up his ass. Then, he died of dysentery, he give me the watch. I hid this uncomfortable hunk of metal up my ass two years. Then, after seven years, I was sent home to my family. And now, little lady, I give the watch to you."

LMAO!

Ahem, back on subject?