Servainma redemption (Constructive criticism needed)

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Servainma redemption (Constructive criticism needed)

Postby BlueLight » Mon Apr 29, 2013 8:18 am

Sorry but this is still very much a work in progress. In the main setting needs to spell checked. I haven't done so because it's 1 AM over here and i have to be out of the house by 6ish. I need my beauty sleep people. If i don't get it, people start turning to stone by looking at me.

The Setting




The year is 43XX in your civilization calendar. It was foreseen that this would be the time when the servainma are changed, destroyed, eradicated by the demons with angelic hearts! The signs are showing, for the once great trees of life are dying, and once they are dead; no servainma will be born. Your fair and glittering skin that enchants all that see you shall become dust on your home world. For without the servainma to care for the homeworld, it would wither up and die. You are the caretakers, you must live!
The stories seems to be coming true when in the year 42XX your race reached to the stars and met so many different races, and the kindest of them was the humans. A race that look very similar to you except they had pink, tan and black sink compared to your white with hints of silver, gold and copper skin. Your race was never allowed to visit surface of their worlds as a deadly virus was slowly killing off their race's "females" as they called them. It seemed they thought your race, the servainma would also become carriers because they're a lot like females.




Over the years to human empire slowly started to implement rules for a federation, but with each step they took to this new kind of government they also took a step into tyranny. The new age came, and your once peace loving friends, started it's self imposed righteous conquest of the entire quadrant of space. Their neighbours quickly fell to their might. They imposed slavery on the conquered races under the guise of accepting them as member of the federation.

A message was sent, echoing through all populated star system, declaring that the known galaxies must join a unionized group . The message while not directly threatening, did have a undertone that if a civilization didn't join up with the humans, they would be conquered. Some races joined the humans and were accepted with open arms at first, but slowly it was clear they were nothing more than slaves with benefits (<3... I kid about the heart!), while others tried to stay neutral; however most of the free races joined together in a planetary Isocracy government. While not officially the leaders, the TanKA acted as a the leader of this new government. The Servainma were lost as to what they should do. They stayed neutral as long as they could but as one system fell after another, it became clear that the humans would just trample across the servainma without a second thought. Fear rose in every servainma as the thought of their beautiful forest being destroyed.
That's when the TanKA offered a deal to the servainma . If the servainma would join the Isocracy union, they would not only help the servainma defend their home world, but also help them develop the infrastructure to build the warship on the lifely moons of their system. In exchange the servainma would act as diplomatic advisors to the TanKA since well, pig people aren't the most charming ever known.

It was at this point where the union started winning major battles against the Human's federation. Each battle was given all they had, and they slowly started to take system, back from the humans empire. The races freed from the humans, were forced to construct ships for the union; sometimes the conditions these works were forced to endure was to hazardous. Sometimes the workers peacefully protested by this new slavery, only to get placed along a wall and shoot for their trouble. The servainma knew full well what was going on, unlike some of the union members who pretended ignorance. Even small evils like this must happen for the servainma cause was righteous; to save the forest of the home world, nothing else mattered. months turn into years, and the union had made minimal progress on the main front while the humans made just a bit more progress on a second theater of war. The union thought of the battle in a 2 dimensional way while the humans thought effective in 3 dimensions and experimented with the fourth, without favorable results.

The war seemed grim, and anyone who entered the front lines was expected to return in a body bag if ever. Then signal, one that got past the empires censors and was broadcasted to though the unions jamming signals to all their planets declaring that the resistance movement gathered enough strength to move to the stars and fight the federations. They declared themselves the New Terran Empire (NTE). The union rejoiced as broadcast stations filled with the message of a possible ally. The signalled traveled from planet to planet at speeds that were faster than light itself.


The entire Servainma race quickly became worried that the prophecy might be come true. "this would be the time when the Servainma are changed, destroyed, eradicated by the demons with angelic hearts!". They called back of their ships to the homeworld and all ponder what to do. The New Sol Empire was this threat they for saw. All the signs matched with this new Human factions. The union wouldn't fight them, that was clear.

A decision was made to surrender to the federation in hopes they could destroy the New sol empire. They started by protecting the union. All the mines, and factories in the Servainma home system would be buried under rock except the one on the homeworlds 4th moon, then they would give the majority of their fleet to the union. The small force that the Servainma had, would be enough to convince the human's they had not the strength to fight them anymore. If they didn't have enough ships the federation might suspect something they had given their fleet the to union.
In a strange sense, this war had destroyed the Servainma heart to compassion, they just didn't noticed it yet. They had allowed some some of the most immoral things to happen in the name of defending their home world; and yet here, on the eve of the their betrayal , they returned the resources the union would need to fight the federation. The very resources that would speed along the possible destruction of the human race.

The Union suddenly felt itself become shaky again as the Servainma were not their support them. The factions started to to become divided in what actions they wanted to take. The TanKA started to resort to bullying to just get effective results. Some members wanted to teach the Servainma a lesson, but the TanKA forced all groups to agree that taking ships off the front lines would be disastrous. While the federation did press it's advantage, the Empire quickly took advantage of it's enemies' flank, destroying fleets with hit and run tactics while they battled the union. They started to gain star system slowly and steadily from the empire and some reports say that systems resulting from the union have also joined the New Sol Empire.

Servainma homeworld sends a message to the earth Federation declaring the Servainma completely surrender. The entire ordeal starts 6 months after that as the empire's reach only then could reach you. However, the impression you get, is if you had not sent that message, they'd still be here at your doorstep; maybe a little later, but still here nonetheless.

Your leaders are taken in chains before the president of the Federation, as they stand their, he looks at them. They offer their forces to him. They beg him to allow them to go after the Empire. "Are you all to cowardly to help defeat the union for the common good of all?" The president asks, in a tone that sends shivers of fear down everyone's spine. If they answer yes they would be killed, answer no and they'd be fighting the wrong enemy. The notion accorse to one the Servainma leaders, and she informs him that the union is using slave labor from worlds originally captured by the federation, but then taken by the union. That information released to the population of both the union and the federation would increase his population's willingness to fight, and lowers the unions resolve. After much more pleading for his to allow what was left of their forces to hunt the empire, he relented.

5 years has past since that day and the union is being backed up into a corner, but at the same time the union is dividing the federation up, and cutting off important supply lines.

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Re: Servainma redemption (WIP)

Postby BlueLight » Mon Apr 29, 2013 8:18 am

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Name: Servsinma


Hair: Brown, Oakred, dirtyblond, black,


Skin: Tan, brown, dark with a hint of green.


Home World Clothing: A mixture of lose fitting cloths made from plant matter and animal skins. It's designed to protect the Servsinma wearing it from scratches. Not really the most attractive set of clothing even if you're in to lose clothing.


Diplomatic Clothing: Exotic dress made with silk; designed to have cloth floating in the air. there is normally slits on the along the legs and arms to expose skin. Servsinma always wear their hair in a bun or some sort of design to make sure their hair doesn't touch the silk in the clothing. It's just a diplomatic standard of theirs even if they're not wearing silk.


General description: They are a race born of the forest, to take care of the forest. Their job is to care for the forest which in turn the forest takes care of them. They don't normally build city except the city of Arni; it built on a inactive volcano and it's one of the few places the forest will not grow no matter how much effort the Servsinma put into it. This is the only place on the home world where Servsinma willingly mine resources and launch space craft since the forest can not be damage from this location.


General religious description: Servsinmas' are deeply loyal to the forest and will not allow any harm to happen to it. They are all united and will kill anything that they see as a threat
to the life giving forest. It is they're holy duty as great creatures to care for this Eden and make it flourish.
Breeding Habits: The Servsinma don't breed or even have lesbian sex. They are born by old and wise trees which creates them and leaves them out in the wild so their sisters may find them.


special traits: All Servinmas are telepathically connected at all. To share thoughts they must considerate a bit but they are able to easily sense the general thoughts of a room. All Servinmas are female.



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Name: TanKA


Hair: None


Skin: Pinkish white, Big Black Spots (rare)


Homeworld/Diplomatic clothing: They like pretend they are more important than they really are; so they wear these silly robes that have metal bars sowed into it. the general thought going though the TanKA mind is "Only some one rich and powerful could afford this".


General description: They are a humanoid race that nearly killed itself with total greed. The result was a quickly required change in their social contract. If one did no follow the honorable rules of greedos they would be bared from obtaining anymore wealth or power. The rules of greedos are a confusing set of laws that no non TanKA understands. They are purely social and no laws are in place to support them. However if should break the rules of greedos, he shall go without food, shelter or hope to fend himself off from raiders who pray on those who dare put their own greed above others.


General religious description:They are a race that desires the illusion of power and wealth as much as the real thing. If one seems powerful, then they are powerful.


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Name: Human federation


Hair: black, brown blond, red, white.


Skin: white/pale, medium white, tan, medium dark, dark.


Clothing: clean cut and very military like. Every boy must wear a uniform that is exactly the same in every aspect to their peers. This uniforms change with rank but others wise they don't change.


General description: The once noble human empire fell into civil discourse as a new age was dawning. What followed was a federation in name only. Their once noble ways were lost to their greedy desire for control. They have a need for the genetic code of as many species they can get their hands on; and the reach this goal, they will enslave the galaxy.


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Name: Human Empire


Hair: black, brown, blond, red, white.


Skin: white/pale, medium white, tan, medium dark, dark


Clothing: a mixture of grubby clothes, to old navy suits and old armor.


General description: The human civilization is split, and these humans are the proof. They see the evil in the federation heart, and can't stand what it will do to their loved ones or their own person. Some joined the empire out of fear, other joined out of a sense of duty.
Any who join the empire are labeled as traitors by the federation. Their numbers are small and they don't have the ability the federation does to reproduce.


General religious/cultural description: They have sworn of defend a group of humans the empire has enslaved and started trading as commodities.
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Re: Servainma redemption (WIP)

Postby BlueLight » Mon Apr 29, 2013 8:19 am

Character sheets place holder.
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Re: Servainma redemption (WIP)

Postby Goryokaku » Mon Apr 29, 2013 11:06 pm

ooooh you've got my hooked already Blue ^_^
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Re: Servainma redemption (WIP)

Postby MelissaB » Tue Apr 30, 2013 2:34 am

Sounds cool
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Re: Servainma redemption (WIP)

Postby Reapergod36 » Sun May 05, 2013 9:07 pm

I'll give it a look.
Death Is Inevitable.
Humanity Destroys Itself.
I Destroy All, But How Can I Do This.
Without Destroying Myself?
The Answer Is Simple.
I Do On The Inside...

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Re: Servainma redemption (WIP)

Postby BlueLight » Mon May 06, 2013 6:50 am

I got off my ass and added 2 profiles. I need to write both the Human profiles, write up extra information like what will be happening in the RP, Where you're characters are, What are your limitation and other such bla bla stuff. Then i will have to fix for typo's.

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Re: Servainma redemption (WIP)

Postby Goryokaku » Tue May 07, 2013 7:34 pm

Always wanted to play something that was akin to a Dryad and the Servsinma seem to fit the mold well, when you get to making player character sheets Blue I'll definately make one, are all Servsinma cat eared people like the picture?
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Re: Servainma redemption (WIP)

Postby BlueLight » Sun May 19, 2013 6:26 am

Sorry, i likely my last post got eaten.
Um, those aren't cat ears... .There hippie elf ears.... You know some one is a dwarf fortress player when they uses Hippie and elf in the same sentence.

I still need to do the human profile and then make the campaign flavor text thing. Then it's write the campaign itself and pretend i have time to do this. I'm likely only going to accept 3 people because my time is limited. That or wait until after finals.
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