Hentai: Peach's Untold Tale 3.48 (Nov 2/18) - HIATUS

[Ivan-Aedler]

Version 1.8.9 is out.
I optimized the SMB2 vase. From 232 curves to 29!

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I never get particularly aroused from TXT stories alone. I need some visuals, especially animations.

Text stories were so common in ancient times. In 1992, I remember some BBS texts that were soooo good, and in that time, I havent known any good visual game (maybe some consoles like Amiga, or VHS videos). Well, its up to each person to ger aroused or not from TXT. But, of course, we live in a more immersive/multimedia world now. I'm not saying everyone has to stick with TXT, surely not. But yes, they can flourish our mind to get a yet better graphical story. Everything starts in our mind.

I wish you had a copy, Ivan. Then you could send one to do all the work stuff and you can do anything else. Like work on this game, sleep with hot women and be a king!... inside your own house.

Hehe a king, nowadays? Difficult. But not impossible

Yeah, but you draw as well, you know that. And of course your family just so happens to walk in during a time that boobs can be seen on your screen. Or worse, you're drawing a pussy.

If I get any problem, I just say: 'Its for science!' , or 'I'm not playing violent games!', or 'come on, Niemeyer was an architect who used to get inspiration from hot women curves!', or 'come on, I'm not gay'

But I seriously can't draw. I can have the perfect picture in my head, but I can't get it out of my hands. I can try, but don't count on anything.

Neither an square? Sometimes I draw just an square, then I say 'YES!! this can be an underground area!'

Hey Ivan, make sure you take breaks occasionally. Tension/stress can be a really bad thing. And the last thing we want is to see you end up in a hospital. And that is not because of this game, but because we care about you. Take it slow when necessary.

Don't worry, really.

Wait, Humbird0 was on here for a while. Why did he stop coming here? Is he too busy working on other stuff? I hope he gets back and helps you understand AS3, it would be awesome seeing the game work more efficiently.

He's working with 'Pokemon!', and a hentai forest game. He's a bit busy. I told him I am still learning state machines. This will optimize MIM even more.

Also, I seriously need to go to sleep now, it's past 4 am.

Ok, have a good night Thanks for the meeting. I may release 1.8.9 in any minute. I hope my new Peach squatting animation is at least decent

[MPLDAM9919]

Spoiler (click to show/hide):

Donkey Kong comes running toward Princess Peach.
DK: Ook Oook!
Peach: Eeek! Someone please save meeee!!!
Pauline: DK, down!
DK calms down
Pauline: Oh, so it's you. The one who stole my spotlight all those years ago. (she holds a grudge, you see)
Peach: Umm... who are you again?
Pauline: I'm Pauline! How can you forget the one who you stole all the glory from?! The fans, the games, the beautiful guys with large erect members waiting to serve you. All that could've been mine!
Peach: I'm sorry, but Mario never talks about you. And I don't want that... last thing you said. More importantly, why are you with Donkey Kong?
Pauline: Oh this?! DK is my playmate. He loves playing with me and now he'll play... with you!
(Try to confuse DK and run away) (Subject)

If you try and confuse DK
Peach: Here that DK?! Pauline wants to play with you!
DK: Ook? Ook Oook! ( DK jumps on Pauline and tears her dress)
Pauline: No, you ape. You have to play with her!
(It's too late. DK begins fucking her)
Pauline: No, I... Aah, Ooh, well, ooh, okay... Aaaaaaah~! Oo......
Peach: Time to leave. Let's hope I don't run into those two again. (And we know she will )

If you subject you'll get a sex scene of course. What that will be, I don't know yet. Maybe I'll let MPLDAM write that part. I have a feeling he wants to get the scenes with girls in them, so I'll let him if he wants.

Rawk Hawk 1st Draft

Revision 2 by me, original by MPLDAM9919:

Spoiler (click to show/hide):

Rawk: Ha! A challenger? You are about to get RAAAAAAAAAAAAWKED!!! Wait...You're Gonzales' gal!
Peach: You must be Rawk Hawk. Didn't Mario beat you before? Twice even? (a bit more innocence in her tone would look great I think)
Rawk: Don't remind me....But, I didn't know Gonzales' gal looked so good! How about we go to the Champions' room and I'll RAAAAAWK your world? (We need more RAAAWK jokes) Or maybe you want it right here (in the ring)?
Peach: I rather fight you! (why not incorporate an option here. Peach can fight, or "play" )
Rawk: FINE! But if you lose, 'Little Hawk' will get to RAAAAWK your tight pussy! (I think Rawk Hawk would name his member. He's so high and mighty after all)

[Battle starts]
*Peach WIN*
Rawk: AAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!!! I got RAWKED by a woman! You may pass through!

*Peach LOSE*
Rawk: Time to RAAAAWK!!!
Rawk will grab Peach (like in the second pic), lick her pussy, then fuck her while standing up.

Very good, MPLDAM. You get an A- this time.

Mona

Spoiler (click to show/hide):

Mona 1st draft
Mona: Hey Princess Peach!I'm sorry I don't have any miro-games for you to play at the moment. I've been very busy here at my pizza parlor. Can you help me out? I have this cool apron for you to wear! I think you would look cute in it!<3
Peach anwser 1: I'm a little busy.
Mona: I understand. You have to rescue Mario. I'm sure you'll fine him.
*nothing happens and she can talk to Mona again*

Mona: Did you change your mind?
Peach answer 2: I can give you a hand. (Peach answser 1 is now "No" for when you talk to Mona again after rejecting her offer)
Mona: That's great! Here's you apron! You can get started by washing the dishes.
*Peach now earns the apron and screen fades out*
*Fade In to Peach washing dishes at frontview*
*Mona walks in*
Mona: You look tired. How about taking a little with me?
Peach: A break sounds nice. Do you have any tea?
Mona: I've got something better than tea!<3
*Mona grabs Peach's breasts from the back*
Peach: WHAT THE?!? Mona! What are you...
Mona: Hush! We're on a break. I'm helping you relax!<3
*Mona takes off Peach's dress as well as her own clothes and starts playing with Peach's breasts and pussy*
Mona: My your breasts are so soft! And your pussy's already wet! Mario's lucky to have a girlfriend like you!<3
*Peach CLIMAXES*
Both Peach and Mona are now on the floor in the scissor postion.
Peach: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!! Mona!!! Why are you doing this?!?
Mona: Cause I feel the need for some lesbian sex!<3 (Note: this is the best line I could come up with. I would like to have this changed later. But if you guys like the line, keep it in)
*Things get faster*
Peach: Mona! I'm gonna cum!!!
Mona: Yes! Cum for me! I'm going to cum as well! Let's do it together!<3
*Peach and Mona CLIMAX*
Peach and Mona are lying on the floor. Peach is panting and Mona is blushing and smiling from the CLIMAX.
Peach: *pant* *pant* That was...intresting.
Mona: Mmmmmmmm...<3 That was fun Princess! You can leave now! Just make sure you come back!<3
*End scene*

I don't know what it is, but this scene doesn't feel "right" to me.

There are some odd bits. First of all, Mona doesn't actually make pizzas, she delivers them.
Second, why would Mona ask Peach, famous royalty, to go wash the dishes for her? Wouldn't there be other people able to help out? Mona's Pizza is always brimming with people, so Mona should've come prepared.

Not that this is a bad scene, it just doesn't seem to fall in line with Mona's character to me. Also, Mona's super nice, she wouldn't girl 'rape' anyone... would she?
Can anyone else please comment on this? I'm feeling a bit awkward here.

1. I like your DK/Pauline scene. I'll be willing to rewrite the lesbian scene between Peach and Pauline where Pauline gets back at Peach by fucking her.

2. I like the revison of the Rawk Hawk scene. Allow me to finalize it.

Spoiler (click to show/hide):

Rawk Hawk Final script by MPLDAM9919 and Quiz
Rawk: Ha! A challenger? You are about to get RAAAAAAAAAAAAWKED!!! Wait...You're Gonzales' gal!
Peach: You must be Rawk Hawk. Didn't Mario beat you before? Twice even? (a bit more innocence in her tone would look great I think)
Rawk: Don't remind me....But, I didn't know Gonzales' gal looked so good! How about we go to the Champions' room and I'll RAAAAAWK your world? Or maybe you want it right here (in the ring)?
Peach: I rather fight you! (why not incorporate an option here. Peach can fight, or "play" )
Rawk: FINE! But if you lose, 'Little Hawk' will get to RAAAAWK your tight pussy!

[Battle starts]
*Peach WIN*
Rawk: AAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!!! I got RAWKED by a woman! You may pass through!

*Peach LOSE*
Rawk: Time to RAAAAWK!!!
Rawk will grab Peach (like in the second pic), lick her pussy, then fuck her while standing up.
Peach: AAAAAAAAAH!!! I'm being raped! Mario! Help me!
Rawk: YEAH!!!! Now for the main event!
Rawk Hawk now takes out his "Lil' Hawk" and sticks it in Peach's pussy and starts fucking her doggy style.
Peach: AAAAAAAAAAAH!!! I never had a bird fuck me before! It's HUUUUGE! STOP IT!
Rawk: Sorry, babe! But I have to get back at Gonzole somehow. And banging his gal is the best way! I wish had my camera with me!
*CLIMAX* Rawk Hawk cums in Peach's pussy then out of her pussy. He falls on to ground on his back. Peach is still in the doggy postion.
Peach: Mario...I'm sorry
Rawk: Thank...you...Glad...that...I...rawked...your...world...you may pass...ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ
Rawk Hawk falls asleep.
*End Scene*

3. Well Mona's under Kemek's spell. He zapped her while Peach was doing the dishes. Problem sovled.

And let me know what type of scene you want me to write for you doing Peach, Quiz.

[AsianP3rsuas10n]

May I step in for a bit?

I found I few things I thought might've been weird in your lines. I shall show u them. Change them if u think they are good. If not bleh.

Spoiler (click to show/hide):

Rawk Hawk Final script by MPLDAM9919 and Quiz
Rawk: Ha! A challenger? You are about to get RAAAAAAAAAAAAWKED!!! Wait...You're Gonzales' gal!
Peach: You must be Rawk Hawk. Didn't Mario beat you before? Twice even? (Revise: You can just say "Oh!(with peach's oh! sound) You must be rawk hawk! Mario how great your fight was. I'm sorry you lost." I feel like we should tyr to keep Peach more polite than "Oh I know u, you lost to my boyfriend haha" (a bit more innocence in her tone would look great I think)
Rawk: Don't remind me....But, I didn't know Gonzales' gal looked so good! How about we go to the Champions' room and I'll RAAAAAWK your world baby!? Or maybe you want it right here (in the ring)?
Peach: I rather fight you! I have normal line and a whore line. Normal: I'll do whatever it takes to save Mario! Whore: Oh but my fragile tight body couldn't possibly fight your nice tone muscles!(sex)(why not incorporate an option here. Peach can fight, or "play" )
Rawk: FINE! But if you lose, 'Little Hawk' will get to RAAAAWK your tight pussy! Lets make two different lines for this as well. Normal: Alright sweet lips, but if you lose, I'll be sure to RAAAAAAWK your little kitty if you know what I mean. Whore: Now your talking baby!(commence Peach lose lines but without the whole "oh im getting raped thing")

[Battle starts]
*Peach WIN*
Rawk: AAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!!! I got RAWKED by a woman! You may pass through!

*Peach LOSE*
Rawk: Time to RAAAAWK!!!
Rawk will grab Peach (like in the second pic), lick her pussy, then fuck her while standing up.
Peach: AAAAAAAAAH!!! I'm being raped! Mario! Help me!
Rawk: YEAH!!!! Now for the main event!
Rawk Hawk now takes out his "Lil' Hawk" and sticks it in Peach's pussy and starts fucking her doggy style.
Peach: AAAAAAAAAAAH!!! I never had a bird fuck me before! It's HUUUUGE! STOP IT! how about "*peach's oh! noise or Ah! noise* I've never had a bird in me before! Its so BIG!! Please! Take it out!"
Rawk: Sorry, babe! But I have to get back at Gonzole somehow. And banging his gal is the best way! I wish had my camera with me! Change "I wish had my camera with me!" to "I wish ol'Gonzales could see this" indicating he has done something that would put Mario to shame.*CLIMAX* Rawk Hawk cums in Peach's pussy then out of her pussy. He falls on to ground on his back. Peach is still in the doggy postion.
Peach: Mario...I'm sorry
Rawk: Thank...you...Glad...that...I...rawked...your...world...you may pass...ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ I dont think this is the right line to say. This may be better "Oh...revenge...feels really good." or something along those lines to show that he has accomplished in getting Mario back for stealing his title.
Rawk Hawk falls asleep.
*End Scene*

Again I know mine arent very good but please consider revising them because you have to remember that Rawk is like a Jersey Shore guido. A meat head, a jock, etc. They say things like baby, and always try to be better than those who surpass them. If you dont like my lines then at least try to come up with ones that fit haha. Sorry if I'm a bit harsh on criticism. I'm no writer so if I'm wrong correct me and I'll learn from the mistakes.


Anyways, reading back into the posts. QUIZ IS IN THIS GAME? I'm a bit jealous now! ahah
Thats cool stuff.

I've read over a couple of the lines u made and I'd really like to revise them Quiz would you be kind enough to send a few lines over to me? In pm. Not all in one pm but separately so I can reply individualy and it's easier to sort out. Anyways, thats all I have time for now. All the new stuff looks awesome Ivan! Lol dont know how many times I'm gonna say it but I gotta keep the enthusiasm up somehow!

[QuizmasterBos]

May I step in for a bit?

Sure, but I got the final say in terms of the lines.

Rawk Hawk Final script EMB by MPLDAM9919 and Quiz
Rawk: Ha! A challenger? You are about to get RAAAAAAAAAAAAWKED!!! Wait...You're Gonzales' gal!
Peach: You must be Rawk Hawk. Didn't Mario beat you before? Twice even? (Revise: *sound*:[b]Oh! You must be Rawk Hawk. Mario told me how you two battled before. I am sorry you lost.
Rawk: Don't remind me....But, I didn't know Gonzales' gal looked so good! How about we go to the Champions' room and I'll RAAAAAWK your world, baby?! Or maybe you want it right here (in the ring)?
Peach: 1 [I'd rather fight you!] 2 [Let's have a little fun right here then!]

If you pick 1:
Rawk: FINE! But if you lose, 'Little Hawk' will get to RAAAAWK your little kitty if you know what I mean!

This is the embarrassed script. MPLDAM must still write a whore scene, but all the embarrassed scenes come first.

But about the lines: You are right about Peach's politeness. She is royalty after all. Added it above.

Added the two options above.

Changed the pussy to kitty. That was a good idea, Asian.

[Battle starts]
*Peach WINS*
Rawk: AAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!!! I got RAWKED by a woman! You may pass through!

*Peach LOSES* or If you pick 2:
Rawk: Time to RAAAAWK!!!
Rawk will grab Peach (like in the second pic), lick her pussy, then fuck her while standing up.
Peach: AAAAAAAAAH!!! I'm being raped! Mario! Help me! (Why is Peach saying she is getting raped? She was okay with the rules?)
Rawk: YEAH!!!! Now for the main event!
Rawk Hawk now takes out his "Lil' Hawk" and sticks it in Peach's pussy and starts fucking her doggy style.
Peach: I never had a bird fuck me before! It's so BIG! Take it OUT! how about "*peach's oh! noise or Ah! noise* I've never had a bird in me before! Its so BIG!! Please! Take it out!" (The voices are planned to happen regardless. I liked your line so I changed it.)
Rawk: OH! So tight! Man, I wish Gonzales could see this! (I like the Gonzales line. Changed.)
*CLIMAX* Rawk Hawk cums in Peach's pussy then out of her pussy. He falls on to ground on his back. Peach is still in the doggy postion.
Peach: Mario... I'm sorry.
Rawk: Revenge. It tastes so... sweet. Baby, I'll Rawk your world... aga...Zzzzz ( I dont think this is the right line to say. This may be better "Oh...revenge...feels really good." or something along those lines to show that he has accomplished in getting Mario back for stealing his title. (Right. Changed it. Also, I removed some unnecessary Z's. The You may pass line is also unnecessary. Peach can just move on now that Rawk Hawk is asleep.
Rawk Hawk falls asleep.
*End Scene*

I'll send this without the comments to Ivan. This is not necessarily final, so it can still change. The "I'm being raped' line should definitely be looked at.

Again I know mine arent very good but please consider revising them because you have to remember that Rawk is like a Jersey Shore guido. A meat head, a jock, etc. They say things like baby, and always try to be better than those who surpass them. If you dont like my lines then at least try to come up with ones that fit haha. Sorry if I'm a bit harsh on criticism. I'm no writer so if I'm wrong correct me and I'll learn from the mistakes.

You got some good ideas though, so I put that in. And stop downplaying yourself Asian! You do this all the time.

Anyways, reading back into the posts. QUIZ IS IN THIS GAME? I'm a bit jealous now! ahah
Thats cool stuff.

Yeah, I know! Imagine the look on my face when I read MPLDAM's idea and Ivan being all cool with it. That's a little difficult to handle when you are just barely awake.

I've read over a couple of the lines u made and I'd really like to revise them Quiz would you be kind enough to send a few lines over to me? In pm. Not all in one pm but separately so I can reply individualy and it's easier to sort out. Anyways, thats all I have time for now. All the new stuff looks awesome Ivan! Lol dont know how many times I'm gonna say it but I gotta keep the enthusiasm up somehow!

You want to take a look at the lines? Sure, I've sent you a couple.

[Ivan-Aedler]

Geno so far

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This is the embarrassed script. MPLDAM must still write a whore scene, but all the embarrassed scenes come first.

I agree. Also, I still think this line is better sounding: 'You must be Rawk Hawk. Didn't Mario beat you before? Twice even?'.
Thats because Peach have a more innocent voice. Its like she looks at something, then talks slowly. "Twice even" is cute.

You got some good ideas though, so I put that in. And stop downplaying yourself Asian! You do this all the time.

I also noticed this! Is that a strategy to do something very nice and misterious in the future?

Rawk scene: revision by MPL, Asian, Quiz and me.

Spoiler (click to show/hide):

RAWK:
Rawk: Ha! A challenger? You are about to get RAAAAAAAAAAAAWKED!!! Wait...You're Gonzales' gal!
Peach: "Oh" (sound). You must be Rawk Hawk. Didn't Mario beat you before? Twice even? ... I'm sorry.
Rawk: Don't remind me....But, I didn't know Gonzales' gal looked so good! How about we go to the Champions' room and I'll RAAAAAWK your world baby!? Or maybe you want it right here (in the ring)?
[OPTION] Fight: Have Sex
-Fight: Peach: I rather fight you! I'll do whatever it takes to save Mario!
-Sex: Embarassed: I...I feel I need your...your thing.
Whore: My fragile tight body couldn't possibly fight your nice tone muscles!

(IF FIGHT) - Embarassed Peach: Rawk: Alright sweet lips, but if you lose, I'll be sure to RAAAAAAWK your little kitty if you know what I mean.
-Whore: Now your talking baby!(commence Peach lose lines but without the whole "oh im getting raped thing")

[Battle starts]
*Peach WINS*
Rawk: AAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!!! I got RAWKED by a woman! You may pass through!

*Peach LOSES* or If you pick 2:
Rawk: Time to RAAAAWK!!!
Rawk will grab Peach (like in the second pic), lick her pussy, then fuck her while standing up.
Peach: AAAAAAAAAH!!! I'm being raped! Mario! Help me! (Why is Peach saying she is getting raped? She was okay with the rules?)
Rawk: YEAH!!!! Now for the main event!
Rawk Hawk now takes out his "Lil' Hawk" and sticks it in Peach's pussy and starts fucking her doggy style.
Peach: I never had a bird fuck me before! It's so BIG! Take it OUT! how about "*peach's oh! noise or Ah! noise* I've never had a bird in me before! Its so BIG!! Please! Take it out!" (The voices are planned to happen regardless. I liked your line so I changed it.)
Rawk: OH! So tight! Man, I wish Gonzales could see this! (I like the Gonzales line. Changed.)
*CLIMAX* Rawk Hawk cums in Peach's pussy then out of her pussy. He falls on to ground on his back. Peach is still in the doggy postion.
Peach: Mario... I'm sorry.
Rawk: Revenge. It tastes so... sweet. Baby, I'll Rawk your world... aga...Zzzzz ( I dont think this is the right line to say. This may be better "Oh...revenge...feels really good." or something along those lines to show that he has accomplished in getting Mario back for stealing his title. (Right. Changed it. Also, I removed some unnecessary Z's. The You may pass line is also unnecessary. Peach can just move on now that Rawk Hawk is asleep.
Rawk Hawk falls asleep.
*End Scene*

[QuizmasterBos]

Geno so far

Geno doesn't look as bad-ass as he does. He's supposed to look very serious.
His hat falls partway over his eyes and why is that lock of hair there on the side? He doesn't have that Ivan.
http://www.freewebs.com/mmxcalibur/Geno.jpg
This very Final Fantasy-esque piece of fan-art looks pretty good as well. Pay attention to the face, not the clothes.

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This is the embarrassed script. MPLDAM must still write a whore scene, but all the embarrassed scenes come first.

I agree. Also, I still think this line is better sounding: 'You must be Rawk Hawk. Didn't Mario beat you before? Twice even?'.
Thats because Peach have a more innocent voice. Its like she looks at something, then talks slowly. "Twice even" is cute.

To each their own I guess. I do think Asian's idea comes closer to Peach' politeness. Think it over.

You got some good ideas though, so I put that in. And stop downplaying yourself Asian! You do this all the time.

I also noticed this! Is that a strategy to do something very nice and misterious in the future?

I think Asian doesn't want to be seen as someone who thinks of himself too highly. But this is taking it too far.

Rawk scene: revision by MPL, Asian, Quiz and Ivan-Aedler.

Spoiler (click to show/hide):

RAWK:
Rawk: Ha! A challenger? You are about to get RAAAAAAAAAAAAWKED!!! Wait...You're Gonzales' gal!
Peach: "Oh" (sound). You must be Rawk Hawk. Didn't Mario beat you before? Twice even? ... I'm sorry.
Rawk: Don't remind me....But, I didn't know Gonzales' gal looked so good! How about we go to the Champions' room and I'll RAAAAAWK your world baby!? Or maybe you want it right here (in the ring)?
[OPTION] Fight: Have Sex
-Fight: Peach: I'd rather fight you!
-Sex: Embarassed: Alright, I'll do whatever it takes to save Mario!
Whore: My fragile tight body couldn't possibly fight your nicely toned muscles! (Ivan, what are you doing? Whore scenes come later.)

(IF FIGHT) - Embarassed Peach: Rawk: Alright sweet lips, but if you lose, I'll be sure to RAAAAAAWK your little kitty if you know what I mean.
-Whore: Now you're talking baby!(commence "*Peach LOSES*" lines but without the whole "oh im getting raped thing")

[Battle starts]
*Peach WINS*
Rawk: AAAAAAAAAAAAARGH!!! I got RAWKED by a woman! You may pass through!

*Peach LOSES* or If you pick 2:
Rawk: Time to RAAAAWK!!!
Rawk will grab Peach (like in the second pic), lick her pussy, then fuck her while standing up.
Peach: AAAAAAAAAH!!! I'm being raped! Mario! Help me! (Why is Peach saying she is getting raped? She was okay with the rules?)
Rawk: YEAH!!!! Now for the main event!
Rawk Hawk now takes out his "Lil' Hawk" and sticks it in Peach's pussy and starts fucking her doggy style.
Peach: I never had a bird fuck me before! It's so BIG! Take it OUT! how about "*peach's oh! noise or Ah! noise* I've never had a bird in me before! Its so BIG!! Please! Take it out!" (The voices are planned to happen regardless. I liked your line so I changed it.)
Rawk: OH! So tight! Man, I wish Gonzales could see this! (I like the Gonzales line. Changed.)
*CLIMAX* Rawk Hawk cums in Peach's pussy then out of her pussy. He falls on to ground on his back. Peach is still in the doggy postion.
Peach: Mario... I'm sorry.
Rawk: Revenge. It tastes so... sweet. Baby, I'll Rawk your world... aga...Zzzzz ( I dont think this is the right line to say. This may be better "Oh...revenge...feels really good." or something along those lines to show that he has accomplished in getting Mario back for stealing his title. (Right. Changed it. Also, I removed some unnecessary Z's. The You may pass line is also unnecessary. Peach can just move on now that Rawk Hawk is asleep.
Rawk Hawk falls asleep.
*End Scene*

Honestly, wouldn't the line "I'll do whatever it takes to save Mario work better for the sex line?

And geez, can we get any more people comment about the lines? Let's finish this up soon, I don't want MPLDAM to get overwhelmed with 5 posts each changing things about the lines. Maybe we ought to do this via PM?

[Ivan-Aedler]

Geno doesn't look as bad-ass as he does. He's supposed to look very serious. His hat falls partway over his eyes and why is that lock of hair there on the side? He doesn't have that Ivan.

If I put the hat partway over his eyes, It will not be possible retain that improved hair, which I really prefer to retain, and more, remember he is incarnated as a real human!
But I can remove the side hair. I may create a 'helicoidal' ear. The image you showed me (final fantasy) is better.

EDIT: Now Look at this.

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To each their own I guess. I do think Asian's idea comes closer to Peach' politeness. Think it over.

But the Asian one its too 'direct to the matter'. We want a cute Peach, which is innocent. She ask (and declare) things like she's saying a bit confused, with one of her hands on her jaw.

Honestly, wouldn't the line "I'll do whatever it takes to save Mario work better for the sex line?

It could be!

And geez, can we get any more people comment about the lines? Let's finish this up soon, I don't want MPLDAM to get overwhelmed with 5 posts each changing things about the lines. Maybe we ought to do this via PM?

It could be!

[QuizmasterBos]

Geno doesn't look as bad-ass as he does. He's supposed to look very serious. His hat falls partway over his eyes and why is that lock of hair there on the side? He doesn't have that Ivan.

If I put the hat partway over his eyes, It will not be possible retain that improved hair, which I really prefer to retain, and more, remember he is incarnated as a real human!
But I can remove the side hair. I may create a 'helicoidal' ear. The image you showed me (final fantasy) is better.

His pupils are too big. I think you're better off making them smaller, he looks too possessed in the one you currently have made.

To each their own I guess. I do think Asian's idea comes closer to Peach' politeness. Think it over.

But the Asian one its too 'direct to the matter'. We want a cute Peach, which is innocent. She ask (and declare) things like she's saying a bit confused, with one of her hands on her jaw.

I think we're better of hearing what Asian and MPLDAM have to say.

And I totally forgot to respond to MPLDAM.

3. Well Mona's under Kamek's spell. He zapped her while Peach was doing the dishes. Problem sovled.

Actually that wouldn't solve it. If everyone would be under Kamek's spell, then Peach would be under it too, which she isn't. And even being under the spell doesn't change a character's personality, it would just make them really horny.

And let me know what type of scene you want me to write for you doing Peach, Quiz.

Sure. I don't want myself to be too rape-y. I just use some aphrodisiac coming from one of the holes in my body. But only after Peach says it's okay.
I'll see what I can come up with later.

[Ivan-Aedler]

His pupils are too big. I think you're better off making them smaller, he looks too possessed in the one you currently have made.

How about now?

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I'll now make his body. Then I can always go back and improve each part.

Body so far: (click to enlarge)

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[Residentlover2]

peach and mona can do ´´accidentally sex´´ mona accidentally falls on peach, she get horny if u are naked and the sex scene starts but if you arent naked she will ask to you if you want to have sex with her

[QuizmasterBos]

His pupils are too big. I think you're better off making them smaller, he looks too possessed in the one you currently have made.

How about now?

Better, but the placement of the hat and the hair is still incorrect.

If you look at the picture of Geno it is clear that the hat falls partway over the eyes. But I said that already and you responded that would mess up the hair. But the hair is already at the wrong spot. The two locks of hair actually fall in between the eyes, not above them.

Try doing that first.

I'll now make his body. Then I can always go back and improve each part.

Body so far:

Not bad, but you can make him a little bit taller. And he obviously still needs his cape, but I know that'll come later.

peach and mona can do ´´accidentally sex´´ mona accidentally falls on peach, she get horny if u are naked and the sex scene starts but if you arent naked she will ask to you if you want to have sex with her

I'll be honest, I didn't think it was a very good idea when I first read it, but thinking about it, it could actually work! But in a different way of course.

Let's think here:

Mona accidentally spills something on Peach's clothes (pizza sauce or something, something that can burn on a person's body) whilst trying to get to her scooter, maybe?
Mona: Oh, I'm so sorry!
Peach: It's alright.
Mona: Take off your clothes quick, we don't want to burn you!
Peach: Alright. [Peach takes her clothes off]
Mona: Let's see if you aren't burnt anywhere...... Looks like you're fine. (She says this whilst inspecting Peach's body for burn marks)
Mona: You know princess Peach, you have a gorgeous body. I know that you don't go that way and neither do I, but do you want to... have some fun?
Option 1[Alright, just this once] Option 2[I'm sorry, Mona. I can't do this]

Option 1: Leads to the sex scene that MPLDAM9919 may write. It's his original idea.

Option 2:
Mona: Alright then. I'll clean off your clothes and then you're good to go. You aren't hurt anywhere?
Peach: No, not at all. Thank you for your concern, Mona.
Mona: No thanks. Now, I gotta continue my work! These pizzas aren't going to deliver themselves, right?! Bye Peach!
*End scene*

[Ivan-Aedler]

[Better, but the placement of the hat and the hair is still incorrect.

How about now? (9th draft) - Taller and with a more 'down' hat and replaced hair, and a bit larger eyes. Click to enlarge.

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Peach: Alright. [Peach takes her clothes off]
Mona: Let's see if you aren't burnt anywhere...... Looks like you're fine. (She says this whilst inspecting Peach's body for burn marks)
Mona: You know princess Peach, you have a gorgeous body. I know that you don't go that way and neither do I, but do you want to... have some fun?
Option 1[Alright, just this once] Option 2[I'm sorry, Mona. I can't do this]

A bit more work is needed here to make Peach a bit more embarassed/surprised, and I think its better to change 'have some fun' to 'feel what I prepared for you' or something like that.

[QuizmasterBos]

[Better, but the placement of the hat and the hair is still incorrect.

How about now? (9th draft) - Taller and with a more 'down' hat and replaced hair, and a bit larger eyes

Ooh, that looks a lot better. We're getting close to the perfect Geno. I see you've also worked a bit on Geno's cape.

You do know that the cape will have to envelop Geno's entire body, right? The dick must be hidden until the scene gets to that point.

Peach: Alright. [Peach takes her clothes off]
Mona: Let's see if you aren't burnt anywhere...... Looks like you're fine. (She says this whilst inspecting Peach's body for burn marks)
Mona: You know princess Peach, you have a gorgeous body. I know that you don't go that way and neither do I, but do you want to... have some fun?
Option 1[Alright, just this once] Option 2[I'm sorry, Mona. I can't do this]

A bit more work is needed here to make Peach a bit more embarassed/surprised, and I think its better to change 'have some fun' to 'feel what I prepared for you' or something like that.

You don't understand the emotion in this scene. Peach can't be embarassed here, she's overwhelmed by emotion.
Another girl, who doesn't want to rape her is asking her to have lesbian sex with her in the nicest way possible.
Peach just tries to stop it, but she doesn't need to act fast, she can just collect her thoughts more or less, and respond in a calm manner.
If Mona was pulling off her clothes and swings her legs around Peach's, then she'd be embarrassed.

And I just wrote have some fun because I just thought of something fast, but I don't understand what "feel what I prepared for you" is supposed to mean. It definitely doesn't befit Mona's character.

[Ivan-Aedler]

Rawk Hawk body style: VOTE POLL STARTED! (click to enlarge)

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Ooh, that looks a lot better. We're getting close to the perfect Geno. I see you've also worked a bit on Geno's cape.

Enlarged the cape (see in my former post).
I think its nice for him to be that size. If he needs to 'mount Peach', he can do that, like a midget.
Otherwise, Peach gets on four (Geno pushes her). I can even create a FRONTSIDE Peach, so we will see her butt raised, before her.

You do know that the cape will have to envelop Geno's entire body, right? The dick must be hidden until the scene gets to that point.

Ok but...later. First, I will have to create the cape enveloping him. Then a SMALL animation of the cape opening. Then this picture (cape before him) will be shown.
I may even work on his torax, giving a more flesh appearance.

You don't understand the emotion in this scene. Peach can't be embarassed here, she's overwhelmed by emotion.

I know but... hmmm so Peach may say 'OOOhh! Allright!' (she's overwhelmed because of the fire), then.
But as for the fire (burns), of course i'ts due to the spilled drink.
It her clothes 'are on fire, I will just to create a bit of 'fire' animation, becaue I even dont know how to make that nicely. I may use the LAVA BUBBLES.

If Mona was pulling off her clothes and swings her legs around Peach's, then she'd be embarrassed.

Ok but I still think its too...formal / without spice for both of them.

And I just wrote have some fun because I just thought of something fast, but I don't understand what "feel what I prepared for you" is supposed to mean. It definitely doesn't befit Mona's character.

Mona have a pizzeria and delivers pizza, right? Mona can say in a way she 'prepared something' in the 'baker' for her (the scene itself).

[QuizmasterBos]

Ooh, that looks a lot better. We're getting close to the perfect Geno. I see you've also worked a bit on Geno's cape.

Enlarged the cape (see in my former post).
I think its nice for him to be that size. If he needs to 'mount Peach', he can do that, like a midget.
Otherwise, Peach gets on four (Geno pushes her). I can even create a FRONTSIDE Peach, so we will see her butt raised, before her.

Yeah, but Geno isn't a midget, he grew from the doll to a size comparable to Peach. Though in this game, since Peach is so tall, I don't mind if he's a bit shorter, he just shouldn't be too short.

You don't understand the emotion in this scene. Peach can't be embarassed here, she's overwhelmed by emotion.

I know but... hmmm so Peach may say 'OOOhh! Allright!' (she's overwhelmed because of the fire), then.
But as for the fire (burns), of course i'ts due to the spilled drink.
It her clothes 'are on fire, I will just to create a bit of 'fire' animation, becaue I even dont know how to make that nicely. I may use the LAVA BUBBLES.

I didn't mean burns as in, it catches fire, but like burning your hands on a fire. It would be a problem if Peach's clothes caught fire, wouldn't it?
And drinks don't leave burn marks, otherwise I'd use that as well.

It must be some substance, like sauce, that can burn a person's body, but not actually makes cloth catch fire. Cheese sauce sounds like a good contender.

If Mona was pulling off her clothes and swings her legs around Peach's, then she'd be embarrassed.

Ok but I still think its too...formal / without spice for both of them.

Remember what I wrote about Mona? They're both nice and not slutty/hyper sexual.
So a scene between them would go exactly like this. If you've played some Warioware, you might understand.

And I just wrote have some fun because I just thought of something fast, but I don't understand what "feel what I prepared for you" is supposed to mean. It definitely doesn't befit Mona's character.

Mona have a pizzeria and delivers pizza, right? Mona can say in a way she 'prepared something' in the 'baker' for her (the scene itself).

Meh, I'm still not a huge fan of that line. Having fun is a girl's way of saying that she wants to do it (sometimes). You know the song, right?
"Girls just want to have fu~uuun!" "Oh, girls just wanna have fun!"
It seems to fit Mona perfectly.

[Ivan-Aedler]

Yeah, but Geno isn't a midget, he grew from the doll to a size comparable to Peach. Though in this game, since Peach is so tall, I don't mind if he's a bit shorter, he just shouldn't be too short.

Like this? (click to enlarge)

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I didn't mean burns as in, it catches fire, but like burning your hands on a fire. It would be a problem if Peach's clothes caught fire, wouldn't it? And drinks don't leave burn marks, otherwise I'd use that as well. It must be some substance, like sauce, that can burn a person's body, but not actually makes cloth catch fire. Cheese sauce sounds like a good contender.

Let's let them as 'chemical burns' then.

Remember what I wrote about Mona? They're both nice and not slutty/hyper sexual. So a scene between them would go exactly like this. If you've played some Warioware, you might understand.

Ok ok...

Meh, I'm still not a huge fan of that line. Having fun is a girl's way of saying that she wants to do it (sometimes). You know the song, right?
"Girls just want to have fu~uuun!" "Oh, girls just wanna have fun!"

You know better than me in that area, so...yes. But I'm always here to see if those lines can improve

[QuizmasterBos]

Yeah, but Geno isn't a midget, he grew from the doll to a size comparable to Peach. Though in this game, since Peach is so tall, I don't mind if he's a bit shorter, he just shouldn't be too short.

Like this? (click to enlarge)

I think Geno can be a little larger. Make him as large as Peach's shoulders.

Remember what I wrote about Mona? They're both nice and not slutty/hyper sexual. So a scene between them would go exactly like this. If you've played some Warioware, you might understand.

Ok ok...

Meh, I'm still not a huge fan of that line. Having fun is a girl's way of saying that she wants to do it (sometimes). You know the song, right?
"Girls just want to have fu~uuun!" "Oh, girls just wanna have fun!"

You know better than me in that area, so...yes. But I'm always here to see if those lines can improve

Of course you may improve them. But I like my original line better.

[Mr D]

you have the hair on the wrong layer btw (look at Genos ear).

[Ivan-Aedler]

you have the hair on the wrong layer btw (look at Genos ear).

Its Geno's yellow cape.

I think Geno can be a little larger. Make him as large as Peach's shoulders.

Please explain. Make him (his head) higher than Peach shoulders (where the pink should clothes are)?

Of course you may improve them. But I like my original line better.

The same as me, as I like mine too

[QuizmasterBos]

you have the hair on the wrong layer btw (look at Genos ear).

Its Geno's yellow cape.

It does look weird. Compare it to the artwork:

His cape also has a nicer blue in the artwork.

I think Geno can be a little larger. Make him as large as Peach's shoulders.

Please explain. Make him (his head) higher than Peach shoulders (where the pink should clothes are)?

Yes, Geno's total length should go up as high as Peach's shoulders.
Scratch that. That's still too short. I think if Geno's eyes are just as high as Peach's nipples, you would have it.