Egg's sprite attemts

[ByHisBillowingBeard]

I concur. Looks cute.
Big eyes, generous mouth.

[Blaze]

I knew I should said the whole thing, I know it is anime style, but I personally don't think anime style eyes suit Krystal. They might look better if it was further forward. Having a good second look is making me think that they look too big because they are too far back.

[Anonymous]

you should lower down the eye at thetop back of the eyeball. i'm pretty sure thats whats making it look weird.

[ronpepper]

Egg, just keep doin what you're doing. You don't see these guys showing you how they'd do it. Everyone is a critic. Not everyone is an artist or as talented as you.

[Thaedael]

From one artist to another, my only criticism is to add a bit of shading to it (granted I am sure it still very much a WIP), otherwise it's spot on. I also look forward to how you fill out the line-art of her body, I like the perkiness you added to her breast while keeping them a reasonable size ^^.

Edit: Fixed spelling.

[Anonymous]

oh no i think it looks perfect. thats just what other people are saying so i was trying to clear it up
incase they weren't saying it right.
i just forgot to and the other stuff to it.

[Zeus Kabob]

Yeah, I think it looks great.
I think that it is a completely different style, but it's an artistic rendition and doesn't have to follow the original style.

[Eggplants]

Hey thanks heaps for the feedback guys! And about the eyes, I just wanted to show you what they'd look like with the rest of the body to have a bit more perspective. I don't really want to push them any further forward because it makes her look less foxy and if anything I think it makes em look even bigger. I did however tilt them back a little and even though it was only by eight degrees, I think it really did do the trick because she just looks a bit more comfortable to look at now which if so many people are going to see her, this is definitely what I want to aim for.
@Thaedael thanks man! I was pretty happy with her tits too because I really don't like to cover up too much of hey body just for the sake of big tits and as a very delayed response, welcome back man!
@ronpepper I actually like to receive allot of criticism because when I used to just rely on myself for criticism I got nowhere fast! Still I'm very happy to hear that because with so much criticism I don't know what I doing right (if anything) so thanks!
and @Zeus THANK YOU! Criticism is great an all, just as long as the critic can differentiate problems from style choices.

Enough talk, Eggplants! More WIP! *whip crack* *whip crack*

okay! okay!

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yeah I know the transition from blue to white is pretty sharp but idk I kinda like it. It makes her look wild and foxy. . . . . . that and I really can't be fucked redoing it right now.

[wizard]

Personally I'd make her tits a touch bigger, but that's just my taste. The body proportions seem right to me, and I think you're right about the eyes. Looking forward to seeing some animations with this sprite

[Blaze]

Great job, rotating the eye has made it a vast improvement, I guess my brain knew something was wrong but I just couldn't figure out what it was. I should proberly try to login not so late on, so I give comments to best I can.

I hope my previous comments didn't sound like i was having ago or saying that i didn't think that your work wasn't any good. I was just trying sort out the fact that something just didn't look right too me.

By the way how is the Daughter of The Seven Sands game going I've been trying to find details on it for almost a year.

[trunks2585]

Well she's looking pretty good, there's a few things i'd adjust on the body though.

One is the breasts, i'm not saying make them bigger but they don't seem to sit right on her chest as is right now. her left breast looks like it's being pulled outward and i think the right one is facing the viewers too much for the angle her body is facing.

The other problem is the back, i don't know what it is but we can't seem to stop having issues with the curve of the back. It's too sharp and makes her look like she has no internal organs where her stomach is, the back curve should be more of a gentle curve than a sharp one. I suggest taking the small of her back, and extending it out some to see if that fixes the problem.

[Thaedael]

I was talking to ronpepper all day and eventually we talked about breast`s and three quarter views. There are a few things I noticed now that I didn`t notice on my first glance so I plan to do a bit of sketchwork and pm it to you later as a form of critique .

[Valithan]

her boobs are a touch too low. move em up about the distance of the visible portion of her neck/ move the segment of the closer boob ( that should connect to the armpit) up to where the highpoint of the boobs current are. (or you can check out references on the pectoral major)

Otherwise it the sprite looks pretty spiffy imo.

[ByHisBillowingBeard]

I'm sold on the drastic Blue to White colour shift. The breasts look a little elongated. Perhaps Wizard's suggestions will help.

[Zeus Kabob]

Actually, I was going to critique you for your white to blue shift (and I might still), but I was trying to make the transition more smooth in GIMP, and I couldn't do any better than what you have there now. I will now begrudgingly accept that that transition is best (and I do like it, I was just trying to make it more smooth).

[ByHisBillowingBeard]

Looking at it, I'm wondering whether the black outlines for the fur on the belly/front should be thinner as it's rather thick and distorts the.. togetherness of the model.
I think it may actually just be the outlines on the tummy itself. The neck and face appear fine. It could just be that they're close to the thick leg outlining.
Looks a little old schoool which is nice..

[Zeus Kabob]

Uh, how do I post images (as in, can I export them from my computer)?
Because I have something I am relatively proud of to show you.

[trunks2585]

Make sure you're in the full editor to reply rather than using quick reply, towards the bottom there's a 'attachments' tab to click on, that's how you post files.

[Zeus Kabob]

Thanks a lot Trunks.
Here it is. I used GIMP to edit the model in two ways: one, I tried to even out her back slightly; and two, I used the airbrush to lighten up the lines around the bottom of the stomach.
Tell me what you think, and also please tell me what the circled thing is, because I have no idea.

[Thaedael]

The lower end of the ribcage, which is why the breast seem a little low.