LoK Choose Your Own Adventure

[Yawg]

Oh, nice!

*goes off to read 'em now*

[gamerfox]

Worked on a couple of pages, amongst them this: http://editthis.info/create_your_own_ad ... re_victims

I'm gonna leave those alone since I'm working on Krystal confronting Fox at the moment.

[Yawg]

*reads*

I like the way you think. XD

[gamerfox]

My philosophy for the confrontation scenes is make it hard for Fox to swap sus with Krystal, and even if he gets lucky, Krystal will be in control.

[Yawg]

Minor update to the Falco/Krystal/Katt threesome currently ruining the water quality of the starfox pool:
http://editthis.info/create_your_own_ad ... threesome!.

If anyone wants to play around with the other options, be my guest.

On a side note, this story's been up since October, with very little in the way of smut. Let's remedy this, people!

[gamerfox]

On a side note, this story's been up since October, with very little in the way of smut. Let's remedy this, people!

You just gave me an idea on what to do if Katt and Krystal head to Fox's room.

[IrrelevantComment]

Ah, my pages aren't getting finished this week... way too much to do.

[Spycam]

Put in the topless wakeup scene Sunday night, but there's a follow up scene that I haven't had time to finish. Hopefully I'll be able to make a few additions Saturday.

[gamerfox]

So, for the Krys-Katt-Fox threesome, should Fox be in the middle, domming Katt but subbing under Krystal or should he sub under both the ladies?

Also, for the new version of the diagram, what supergroups should I make? Places or arcs?

[Spycam]

The threesome scene is totally up to you, but the lead up does seem to indicate that Krystal is more aggressive that Katt in this arc. It really depends on how you want to portray Fox. Fanfic writers seem to have a generally low opinion of him, considering he's the hero. If he comes into one of my arcs, he'll be fighting tooth and nail, albeit with futile results.

For the new diagram, I personally would prefer to see everything by location (I'm actually planning add locations to the status bar), but you could always group arcs under locations.

[somerandomguy]

Alrite looks great that we are making such great progress, im sorry i havnt been contributing much lately due to a few college papers being due but oh well im back in the game this week hopefully i can help crank out some pages figure ill continue the masturbation scene in the arwing where else do you think i should work on? in your opinion haha

[gamerfox]

Alrite looks great that we are making such great progress, im sorry i havnt been contributing much lately due to a few college papers being due but oh well im back in the game this week hopefully i can help crank out some pages figure ill continue the masturbation scene in the arwing where else do you think i should work on? in your opinion haha

Like I said, I'm leaving the options to http://editthis.info/create_your_own_ad ... re_victims open for other editors because I'm working on the bed threesome scene

[somerandomguy]

Alright cranked out two pages, the arwing masturbation and the fox's room with bikini. and if you guys see anywhere where there could be improvement feel free to delete some of my writing and add in as you please i wont be "offended" or something, im just wanting to provide quality reading. anyways will be cranking out more as time permits though

[Yawg]

Honestly, I like it.

My ONLY problem- only problem- is that this page is a bit short. Any chance of adding to it a bit?

Or... are my sections too long? I'd make a joke out being 'too long' but I'm pretty drunk at the moment.

[Spycam]

If anyone has a problem with putting too much on one page, it's me haha. Regardless, some pages are naturally going to be shorter than others, and shorter pages can in fact introduce more reader input. For instance, most of my future sex scenes are going to have choices in the middle of them, resulting in a greater number of shorter pages. On the other hand, too little can lose reader interest in a hurry.

I have a singular issue as well. You mentioned 'Cerinian porn', but Cerinia was destroyed. Krystal is the sole survivor. I'm not saying you shouldn't use it, but you may want to address just where Fox would get a hold of such a thing.

[Yawg]

My view of it is this: Krystal was off planet when it blowed up, so surely others were: and some of them were desperate for money.

[gamerfox]

Oh lord, I'm suffering from brain drain.

[gamerfox]

Another page. Options are let Fox dom, make him your bitch, or just make him watch while you have all the fun.

[Yawg]

...where?

I don't see a page for it... its still showing as "47" pages in total on my end.
Linky?

[gamerfox]

...where?

I don't see a page for it... its still showing as "47" pages in total on my end.
Linky?

[url]editthis.info/create_your_own_adventure/(LoK)_Enter_Fox%27s_room_(nude)[/url]