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Poetry Slam

Postby Suraru » Wed Feb 06, 2013 2:31 am

Won second place, here are the version of the poems I used.

Pacifist's War Cry
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I am a weird guy, living by a code that I must abide, and sometimes, I just want to say goodbye. I wear these clothes, which most people say blows, to the point where you could punch them in the nose. But I’m a pacifist, not an activist, it’s my job to ignore the trait that baits me to hate.

I’m a brony, a furry, a computer crazy. I spend one life on the internet as many, making up for the one I should strive, even knowing that if I continue like this I will not survive. Whenever I am outside, I help wherever I stride, not just for pride.

But why, why try at all in a world where people don’t have drive, where hate is the primary emotion that arrives, why do I continue when people thrive to deprive each other of their lives?

So why, why do I try?

This is a pacifist’s war cry, a code that I choose to abide by, and many times, people just say goodbye. I reach to be different, while many people remain ignorant. Minorities once asked for equality, but even after victory, there still isn’t harmony, because no one ever really wants diversity.

Everyone is becoming poor, with delusions of grandeur, when the middle class are the doers and the high class is full of manure. Life isn’t fair, but we’re running out of air, we need to take care, before we all fall into despair.

I see people who sag calling each other fags. Occasionally I’ll notice that smell, then onto drugs I’ll dwell. It seems being doomed is a guarantee, and I felt I had nothing more to lose, but it took pony staring at me, as the only thing keeping me from a noose.
But I won’t say goodbye, and I won’t turn a blind eye.

This world needs peace, before we see the world in pieces.


Video and the second one coming soon.

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So I'm going to be participating in Louder Than a Bomb for a collage group I met, what do you guys think of this?

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I am a weird guy, living by a code that I must abide by, and sometimes, I just want to say goodbye. I wear these clothes, which most people say blows, to the point where you just want to punch them in the nose, but I am pacifist, not an activist, it's my job to ignore the trait that baits me to hate.

I'm a brony, a furry, a computer crazy, I spend my life on the internet as many lives, making up for the one I should strive, even knowing that if I continue like this, I will not survive, but why survive? Why try to do better?

Why try at all, in a world where people can't drive, where hate is the primary emotion that arrives, why do I continue to try when people thrive to deprive each other of their lives?!!?!?

So why!?! Why do I try!?!?

This is a pacifist's war cry! A code that I choose to abide by, and many times, people just say goodbye! I reach to be different, while many people remain ignorant! Minorities once asked for equality, and they got it! But there still isn't harmony, because no one ever really want's diversity!

Everyone is becoming poor, with delusions of grandeur! When the middle class are the doers, and the high class is full of manure! Life isn't fair, but we are running out of air! We need to take care, before we all fall into despair!

It seems being doomed is a guarantee, and it took a pony staring at me, as the only thing keeping me from a noose, because I felt I had nothing more to lose! But I won't say goodbye, and I won't turn a blind eye!

I can't walk down the street without seeing a brawl! I see people who sag calling each other fags! Occasionally I'll notice that smell, then onto drugs I'll dwell! ... This world needs peace, or soon we'll see the world in pieces.

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Last edited by Suraru on Thu Feb 07, 2013 8:11 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby SugarCookie » Wed Feb 06, 2013 2:42 pm

I already made a Poetry! thread, but it got locked. My school has a poetry slam group, but I never really thought about joining it. However, being in the creative writing class, I will be attending, but not preforming in one that a collage is hosting. I will totally loose it if I see you.
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Zeus Kabob » Wed Feb 06, 2013 4:38 pm

That's a cool slam, Suraru.
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby karminator98 » Wed Feb 06, 2013 5:13 pm

Wow, that's nice! I slam myself, in french though.

Very nice to read (even so slam's not meant to be read but to be shout out loud, IMO), and break a leg!

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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Suraru » Wed Feb 06, 2013 7:50 pm

Thanks!
And I will be yelling it, if I can get a copy of the video, I'll see if I can post it on youtube and I'll link it.

Also Sugar, ;)
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Zeus Kabob » Wed Feb 06, 2013 8:05 pm

Yeah, really. If I meet people from this forum, I'll flip. :)
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Suraru » Wed Feb 06, 2013 8:14 pm

Lols, here is another one I wrote up, if I get into the second round. I have no one around right now to give me any criticism before I yell it to a crowd of a few hundred people tomorrow, so I could really use some comments on this one.

Also, maybe I should give a shoutout to Sugar to see if she is actually there? Nah, as awesome as it would be to see an erotic forum member blush like crazy in front of her entire class, I think I'll save her the trouble... for now. >8D

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Sometimes, people look at me and ask if I am alright. To which I usually reply,
Yeah, I’m just tired...

Tired of all the hate I see where ever I walk
Of listening to people who only talk
Tired of sharing the road with drivers who won’t let me pass
while America slips into the lower class

Tired of this generation
sending us all into damnation
Tired of these politicians
who need to be removed from their positions

Tired of planet being drained of its precious vitality
while everyone looses their sanity
Tired of all these horrible thoughts
of a belt around my neck tied in knots

Tired of living in this world
while the real plot unfurled
Tired of the government
who lock everything in their basement

… But most of all, I’m tired of myself

Tired that I can’t get a promotion
without causing too much commotion
Tired that I can’t stay awake
that lunch isn't my only sleeping break

Tired that actually try
while everyone thinks I just let time fly bye
So tired I could just scream
while I’m haunted by my own dream

…Yeah, I’m just tired.
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Zeus Kabob » Wed Feb 06, 2013 8:45 pm

I say you should do it, Suraru. XD
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby 13Lack12ose » Thu Feb 07, 2013 1:58 am

Although I'm not really one for poetry myself, I've gotta say that these are both quite good, and if you DID post a video, that would be even better than me screaming the words to myself in my head.
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby SugarCookie » Thu Feb 07, 2013 2:19 pm

I swear to god if you do that, I will find you, and slowly invade your dreams with the millions of horrorterrors from the farthest ring of the void, where you will be stuck in a forever trance of sleep, seconds will be converted to years, pleasure is extinct, and suffering will have an entirely new meaning.

Besides, I'll probably just wave if I think it's you.
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby berserkerhorn » Thu Feb 07, 2013 3:18 pm

Are you sure it isn't the other way around Sugar? where ur a bus (subaru) will make your life miserable?
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby SugarCookie » Thu Feb 07, 2013 3:29 pm

What?
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Suraru » Thu Feb 07, 2013 7:54 pm

So I won second place, ima try and get them vids for ya guys, I was kinda awesome.

Also, Sugar, I imagine you were the one waving on the third row on the right?
You looked familiar, and I barely caught your "oh its josh ima do one half wave once, then be too shy and not do anything else"
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Zeus Kabob » Thu Feb 07, 2013 11:20 pm

Ahaha, good work!

'Twould be funny for you two to know each other. XD
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Chameleon » Fri Feb 08, 2013 2:49 am

Slam poetry? Never heard it but it looks cool as fuck. Do you guys ever slam to a beat?

Suraru and sugar are from the same town? You guys should date xD
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Suraru » Fri Feb 08, 2013 2:59 am

We should >:D

And Slam Poetry is more to your own beat in your head. Here's an example;
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JfTa4B7wQ_8
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby SugarCookie » Fri Feb 08, 2013 2:32 pm

Yeah, that was me. Let me know when that video will be posted, yours should of won 1st.
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Suraru » Thu Feb 28, 2013 2:59 am

Yeah, the video recorder messed up the files, so no video!

But! I am working on another poem when I go to state soon. I'll post it for revisions, because I kinda hate it, it's just random thoughts right now, with no rhyme or reason. Needs more structure, flow, etc
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Zeus Kabob » Thu Feb 28, 2013 3:24 am

Yeah, sounds good.
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Re: Poetry Slam

Postby Suraru » Thu Feb 28, 2013 3:31 am

Did I say no video?
What I meant was the recorder dun derped and failed to record the last poem of the first round, and the entire second round. And guess who was the last slam of the 1st round? THAT'S RIGHT! THIS GUY! *mumble mumble*

But I have a few others, and I think Sugar is in the audience, so with her permission I'll link it and point her out for you guys. Meanwhile, ima do that hate poem about my dad, gimma a sec to write it up.
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