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Looking for Feedback

Postby Eiliya » Tue Nov 08, 2016 12:41 pm

Hi there. My name's Eiliya, and I've been playing around with RenPy for a while now, trying to get some kind of a very simple fap-game going. I've got the coding down (it's not something compex, so don't expect too much), but I don't know how to art, so I've been working with random commission artists for it. One of them told me about this place and that I should make a thread to see what people think.

If you don't care about reading the wall of text, you can find a very low-grade demo of the game here: https://www.dropbox.com/s/ewxmzdyvkmqxm ... n.zip?dl=0

So, here's a simple summary of the game.

As the player, you can play either as Theodore (http://i.imgur.com/4tad9M2.jpg) or Abaddon (http://i.imgur.com/AgaFIru.png), both of whom are my original characters. They're well-endowed, arrogant as all hell and more or less live to play around with girls. The game basically starts with the two of them making a bet on who can get the biggest harem, and then the player gets to pick who he wishes to play as. After this, the player is confronted with the first girl of their chosen character, faced with the task of breaking, corrupting and adding her to his harem. This is done through sexual conversion. Basically fucking the girl until she gets addicted to you and can't stand being without you.

Obviously, the game isn't just that simple. First of all, there's a time limit. Failure to break her before time runs out results in a game over. Then there's the fact that all the girls have their own likes and dislikes. Some things give increased conversion rates while others might actually lower it instead. Finally, there's also the matter of how your choices when it comes to poses affect the ending. A girl that's just plowed in missionary pose from start to end will have a significantly different ending than one who gets to experience a multitude of sexual pleasures. In addition to this, the game also has hidden scenes and events that can only be unlocked by getting the girls to specific stats.

Now, I've spoken about a lot of the game, mentioning girls more than a few times, but other than a select few, I haven't actually thought about what girls I want in the game. That's because I was thinking of making this be a patreon project and then letting my patreons vote on what girls to pick as the new targets, so to speak. My thought was to keep the girls as fan characters, mainly from animes and games, but I guess I don't mind characters from comics and books either. At this point in time, the only girls I have in the list are Misaka Mikoto (from A Certain Magical Index), Wendy Marvell (from Fairy Tail), Hermione Granger (from Harry Potter) and Nico Southey (from Azure Dreams). And the number of completed art is next to none, sadly.

If people turn out to be interested, I can upload a demo, but it'll contain incomplete art, sadly. Until then, I'll upload some of the sketches I already have for the game into this thread. As I am sure you can tell, these images were done by different artists. Thanks for giving my thing a read, and I look forward to any kind of response I get (even trolling, cause I love to feed the trolls).

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Re: Looking for Feedback

Postby CondorBoH » Tue Nov 08, 2016 8:38 pm

The summary is well done and your description gives me a good idea of how it plays, but perhaps a demo would be helpful. Even with incomplete assets, it would give people a better feel of your game and also they might find bugs that you haven't found.

As for your girls, my suggestion would be to make some of them semi-original and like 'This is red-haired girl' and 'this is goth girl' or 'this is stereotypical blonde cheerleader'. If you need a roster after filling it with stuff like that, go for parodies of the characters you mentioned. Change their name, give them a slightly different appearance, but not enough that a player doesn't get the reference. IMO, it's probably best to not have full on licensed characters in your game, but parodies should be fine.
And what you actually do is up to you.
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Re: Looking for Feedback

Postby Eiliya » Wed Nov 09, 2016 7:29 pm

Working on putting up a demo as we speak. But do keep in mind that it's gonna be very... incomplete >_<;
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Re: Looking for Feedback

Postby snakevenom386 » Thu Nov 10, 2016 10:08 am

I like the concept a lot, and I'm looking forward to seeing more come out of this.
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Re: Looking for Feedback

Postby Eiliya » Sun Nov 13, 2016 7:34 pm

Alright, so I did a very, very simple demo for this.

Anyone who is interested can find it here: https://www.dropbox.com/s/ewxmzdyvkmqxm ... n.zip?dl=0

I'll also update the original post to include the link.
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Re: Looking for Feedback

Postby Amakuo » Mon Nov 14, 2016 6:28 am

Seems simple but interesting enough. Bonus points if after converting a girl you can go back to her without constraints to replay scenes and unlock her "secrets"/other scenes. Will each main character have his own set of specific girls or will they be competing for the same ones?

If you were looking to hear people's preferences regarding the art, I very much like the artist who did the image with the plant. I'm inclined to agree with CondorBoH regarding avoiding copyrighted characters, but the girl in your demo is very cute (both in terms of character design, and the actual art you commissioned looks great) so I won't be complaining if you keep her in ;)
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Re: Looking for Feedback

Postby Eiliya » Mon Nov 14, 2016 1:24 pm

You'll be able to go back to them, of course, but since I've got limited funds, it'll more or less be the same text and the same images. There are a few hidden scenes (the "good" ending changes slightly depending on what pose you use, among other things). As things stand now, they'll be competing for different girls, but I might change that in the future (trying to steal your rival's girls is a legit way of reducing their harem, after all).

Regarding the art, I'm thinking of trying to get a different artist for each new girl, as a means to kinda spread the word about not-so-well-known artists. But I haven't decided yet. The three you see in the original post are StevieWonderZ, YUI and TheGreatLionfishArt. Except for YUI, I found the other two while randomly exploring Picarto. I've got a fourth artist named Kaxlene who's working on a new girl (second character for Abaddon) and I'm considering picking her up as the main artist for the project but it's gonna depend on my finaces, of course.

As for what girls I put in, I'm probably gonna make them all be famous characters from various popular shows. Although I'm gonna be using patreon for the project, the game itself will be free for anyone who wants to give it a try, so I'm not all that worried about copyrights and shit like that.
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