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Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 3:19 am

I have an RP idea involving a story I've been working on for years. Problem is, almost everything I could tell you about the ACTUAL story would be huge spoilers. So I'll tell some of the premise, see if anyone is interested.

If ANYTHING confuses you, please, ASK. I'm begging you. I've been working with this whole setting for a long time, so I won't recognize things that will confuse others but not me.

Intro
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The world the story is set on has been split into shards. I'm going to have three to six main shards, each about like a small continent, with one major city, and subsidiary small towns scattered across the rest of the continent. There are certain people among the populace born with special powers. Your character in the story would be one of these. I tell more about each specific shard in a lower section.

Plot
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Someone is gathering shadowy forces in each of the major cities, and trying to cause them all to simultaneously collapse. The forces themselves vary, from actual creatures made of dark energy, to a cult that brainwashes people, to an overcontrolling government.

Powers
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To actually tell you where the powers come from would take a series of books worth of exposition, but at the end of things, certain members of the populace obtained powers, and their children are more likely to be born with powers, but having powers is not a guarantee on whether or not your child will have powers, and neither is there any guarantee that if neither of the two parents have powers, the child won't have them. Also, use of the powers will drain energy from the person. How much depends on how powerful the power, and how difficult what you're doing with the power is. I'm really flexible on what the powers can be, so whatever you can come up with, just don't make it god-moddy. Edit: The energy being taken out of you helps limit god-moddiness, so it's extremely difficult for you to have a power that god-mods.


Continent Shards
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First Shard
Main city: The Obsidian City
The Obsidian City is pure black, and it started as "The City where Dreams Come True." The problem is, things fell into disarray - Some people wanted the same things, and eventually the city broke into sects. You wouldn't know by looking at the city, but it's essentially an all out gang war between three factions. It's not chaos on the streets though. Each gang is backed by a political party and a few corporations, and most deaths are assassinations, carried out in secret. Due to the nature of the factions, there is no real centralized government. The terrain is barren and ashen after years of collecting the resources constantly, the climate is a bit cold. As will be stated by Cobalt in the first real post of the RP (If it does start, and this is Cobalt's city, by the way), it's now where "Dreamers go to die." Not dreams. Dreamers.

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Second Shard
Main City: The Illusionists Town
Started by 'The Illusionist, a place where people could go to forget their worries - No problems, no death, nothing ever breaks, no one ever fights.... Then you peel away the facade created by "The Illusionist," who is actually an A.I. that controls the city, using holograms that can be touched to falsify everything. The Illusionist IS this city's government. The terrain appears lush and green within the illusion, but in reality it's more like the Nevada desert. (The desert on the Ambrosian shard is more like the Sahara, more sandy, unlike this desert, which is more of a red rocky, with lots of canyons. Typhoon lives in the outskirts of this city.

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Third Shard
Main City: The Obelisk
"No one is permitted to leave the oblisk. A curfew is strictly enforced. Marriages are arranged for the sake of creating alliances and gaining power. Each couple may have two children. People who die are incinerated without a funeral, an official announcement will be made on the P.A. system. There i nothing outside the obelisk. There never has been, and there never will be. Even if you found a way to leave, you would simply stop existing. Please consider this before trying to leave."

-The Magistrate

I felt that the poster that's in every hallway in The Obelisk would be appropriate. The government is run by the Magistrate, a gentically inherited position. The terrain outside of the obelisk will be revealed in RP. There's a front door to the obelisk, but the facility is vast, occupying most of the underground portion of the continent, and there are turrets and traps guarding the long hallway in, folloed by a door that has been sealed on the other side with a sheer metal wall. But as hard as it would be to get in, it's nearly IMPOSSIBLE to get out. The character inside is simply named Spike. An unauthorized and abandoned birth, part of the secret group "The Renegades," a group rebelling against the government in the Obelisk and trying to escape.

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Shard Four
Main City: Ambrosia (Yeah, I NAMED this one)
A city colored completely golden, glows in the sunset, a city that started as nothing but scholarly pursuits, they discovered ways to detect people with powers and help them to figure out and develop them. Unfortunately, people can become corrupt, and babies must be registered as powered or powerless at birth, and then monitored for signs of rebellion. The government is made up of a group of elders who will instate new members every so often. On the other side of the shard is a desert, which no one has ever returned from.... Or so claims the government. In reality, the desert is home to raiders, who kidnap people for mass fights to the death in the coliseum. You will find two characters here, one registered, one not. They're cousins. I'll give more info on them soon. If you wish for any more info on the city, please ask, I need to flesh this one out a bit more, but I'm creative, so asking questions will help me to come up with answers and work them into the setting.

I'm going to edit in the other shards soon, these are the most developed, if any of you want more info on anything, please ask a question. I want to know what info would be important and helpful, because that will help me to get the neccesary info up here, so it would be very helpfl. I'm either going to post the character creation sheet in an hour or so, or tomorrow, with examples being some of my characters, two of whom I've already mentioned.

Character Sheets
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Name: Cobalt
Shard: Obsidian Shard (First Shard)
Age: 23
Species: Human
Gender: Male
Powers: Light energy control (Light as in morality, or the wavelength, not the weight)
Description: Dark blue hair, same color of eyes, generally wears a dark jacket, gloves, jeans, and a t-shirt, about 5'11", somewhat muscular.
Bio/Background: Went up through preschool with his twin sister Scarlet, they were together most of the time, until she died in a fire at their elementary school. Cobalt could barely remember what happened in the fire afterwards, only that his mother had saved him. His father mysteriously disappeared shortly afterwards, leaving his mother, Silbit, to raise him. He eventually went through high school, and then got a bachelor's degree, taking a desk job in the Obsidian City. He now lives an average life, not knowing that long ago his powers were sealed, his memories of them removed, to awaken one day when they are needed. One day, he heads to get on the subway and go to work...

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Name: Shiki Kitane (Kee-tahn-ee)
Shard: Ambrosian (Fourth Shard)
Age: 22
Species: Neko
Gender: Female
Powers: Fire, lightning.
Description: Red fur, with a light pink on her underbelly area, about 5'7", fairly thin, decent figure.
Bio: Went theough her life as a fairly model student, bugged Dax quite a bit, but he's the only person she considers her friend. She enjoys messing with him and teasing him about stuff.

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Name: Typhoon Ventus (You'll get it if you know Latin)
Age: 24
Species: Human
Gender: Male
Powers: Wind, though he has specially designed tech that works with his powers and increases their versatility.
Description: Green hair and golden eyes, a scar below his left eye, running along his face, 6'2" tall, quite a bit more muscular, has a tech glove on his left hand and a sword hilt on his right hip. On a seperate note, he has a motorcycle that is also connected to his powers.
Bio: Learned at a young age to cut through the illusions with his fathers sword and his wind powers. Went on to become a mercenary. His little sister was kidnapped when he was 19 and she was 16, she was captured by a cult that brainwashes people. Typhooon has been taking every mission relating to the cult since, secretly gathering info while he was at it.

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Name: Spike (No last name)
Shard: Obelisk
Age: 19
Species: Earth Dragon
Gender: Male
Powers: You would think earth, but it relates more to spikes, you'll see when he uses his powers.
Description: A light brown earth dragon, has spikes on the back of his head, and where his wings would be. He has brown eyes, and a tan underbelly, wears an open leather jacket with the sleeves torn off, and jeans.
Bio: Spike was an illegitimate birth, and as such was abandoned at the Obelisk orphanage. He was given his name for the spikes in seemingly random places on his body. People noticed over time that they would change locations at random, because Spike had control over them. He and the best friend he grew up with at the orphanage started a group called the Renegades, and they're trying to escape the Obelisk. The thing is, his friend died recently, leaving him the sole leader of the Renegades, and he doesn't quite know what to do anymore...

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Name: Ayla
Shard: Illusionist
Age: 22
Gender: Female
Powers: Unknown
Description: Pure white hair, bright golden eyes that sparkle when she's happy, bright red lips, has freckles, 4'7" tall, small to the point of looking fragile, but with how thin she is her curves are still noticable, wears a light blue robe that appears to be too small for her, it ends between her knees and waist and is a bit tight on her, but the sleeves are long, and she wears a light blue ribbon on one side of her hair. She wears black leather boots that go up to her knees. Oh, and the robe tightens at the waist, allowing the bottom to look like a skirt.
Bio: Grew up on the streets, has a low paying job, tries to save up money so that she can occasionally feed herself better, somehow has a bright outlook on life.

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Name: Yassan
Shard: Obelisk
Powers: Healing and can summon a bow that shoots energy arrows, he can also choose to heal with his arrows
Description: Black hair, green eyes, wears a black jacket, 6'1" and somewhat muscular.
Bio: Was an Obelisk guard, but as he moved up in the ranks he saw more and more corruption, and isn't sure who the good guys are anymore. He recently quit his job, and now has a much simpler job.


Please, ask questions. I need to know what info I should put up.
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 3:52 am

Until people ask for more info on something, I think I should start making a character sheet with an example or two. Hopefully people show some interest! :D
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby napsii » Sun May 27, 2012 3:54 am

id really give a more conventional outline of the thread. what you've got here all sounds really fractured and it's kind of hard to keep track of what you're telling me. i'd split it up into an introduction to the world and the plot, some elaboration on its inhabitants/what's in it, the nature of these "powers", etc instead of just raving on about everything in 1 paragraph lol

you should give lots more info on these shards so ppl know what's in them rather than going back to talking about your characters too
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 4:10 am

What's in them isn't really that much, each shard is centered around the capitol. I'll organize it more though, thanks. As far as the actual shards, I'm not able to give more info on the obelisk shard until it's escaped during the plot. The other ones, I'm not entirely sure about how to describe the terrain types. I'll figure something out. Thanks for the help. :)
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby jayjaycaps » Sun May 27, 2012 4:16 am

See? Told ya, first :3

Name: Jason Argo
Shard: Obsidian Shard
Age: 24
Species: Human
Powers: Illusion and Mind Control
Description: Jason has blue eyes, fair skin and sandy blonde curly hair. He lets it go unkempt and unruly, giving up on it. He wears a black vest and a blue dress shirt, black pants and black dress shoes. He always keeps a deck of cards and a book of matches with him.

Jason had dreams of becoming a master magician. Because of his powers, he was a natural at magic, and moved to the Obsidian Shard with the hopes of getting rich. However, he found that the Shard was not the place of hopes and dreams he had thought it was, and quickly lost all of his money. Jason slowly slipped into depression, and gave up on his dream, much like everyone around him.
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 4:30 am

Yes, you most certainly did tell me. One stipulation: the mind control will need to be somewhat limited, you can't just control everyone. The ability to control will depend on the persons willpower. That ok?
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby jayjaycaps » Sun May 27, 2012 4:32 am

Yep. I was thinking more of suggestions, so not straight out mind control. Just couldn't find a better word for it.
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 4:35 am

Never mind, I forgot to add info on where the energy for the powers comes from. Will power will still affect it, but more freedom in each specific action this way.
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby daxtinator396 » Sun May 27, 2012 4:41 am

Name: Dax
Shard: Ambrosia Shard
Age: 23
Species: Neko
Powers: Wind
Description: 5'11, wieghs about 160 lbs. Sandy fur with splotches of black randomly spread across his body including one over his right eye.
Background: Dax was born with powers which quickly revealed themselves as wind swirled around the room. He studied hard to develop them further and was a model student. He didn't interact much witht the other scholars as everyone was involved in their studies so his social skills are a little sub par.
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby napsii » Sun May 27, 2012 4:44 am

you should really expand more on the plot than that dude. camannnnn. you can talk about the plot without giving away spoilers.
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 4:44 am

Nice. Now for my character to be the girl that's always bugging him >w<
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 4:47 am

Ok, the thing is the different shards each have different parts of the plot, and they're own plot on top of that, so I'm not sure how to explain in what actually happens during the RP....
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby daxtinator396 » Sun May 27, 2012 4:48 am

So yeah tell me more about this city by the nae of Ambrosia?
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 4:50 am

Anything more specific you're asking about? The government? ....Something else? I dunno, I always have the most trouble with explaining things like this to people, sorry.

Ok, there's a main university within it. It's a fairly wealthy city, but there's a small slum just outside the city, which is where untagged people with powers hide out. Does that help at all?
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby daxtinator396 » Sun May 27, 2012 5:03 am

Yes it does indeed. though I will ask to know more about the terrian and what not.
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 5:08 am

Lightly hilly terrain, a very mild climate with green pastures, except that on one side of the shard is a desert that none have returned from. (Supposedly)
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby napsii » Sun May 27, 2012 5:11 am

why dont you add all these things to the 1st post instead of leaving it all up to interpretation for you to answer later...this stuff is important

the issue im having is that you're giving like 2 lines of vague description and then the rest of it is spent talking about one of your characters rather than compounding on the scenery or the government or everything else that may be important to flesh it out
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 5:12 am

I'm about to add the desert, with mcuh more detailed info than I just posted.
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby daxtinator396 » Sun May 27, 2012 5:13 am

Seems I have chosen my power well then it should fit well here! Now about the pwers what are the limitatuons and such?
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Re: Dischordant Shards (Working Title) OOC

Postby Paradox » Sun May 27, 2012 5:19 am

Whatever you can think of to do with wind. If you try to do something WAAAAY too big in the RP, I'll tell you to tone it down some, but pretty much anything is fair game.
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