Infinitum (OOC)

[BlueLight]

I want to know if he has problems with my character sheet

[13Lack12ose]

13lack, I'm sorry, but I still have to decline it. Like I said, just changing that doesn't make it meet the standards I'd like.

Well I'm sorry, but since you haven't specified what about it you don't like, I can't really change it.
Plus, I don't really want to roleplay with someone who isn't open-minded enough to accept that revenge is a motive. Not trying to sound like a dick here, but unless the standards to which you want my character sheet to be within are interesting and engaging for me, then I'm not in.

[Inferi]

I'm actually starting to write up the opening scenes now, Los. More people can still join, but I have enough that I feel like I should start soon.

I didn't think you were done, Blue, which is why I didn't say anything. The content of it is fine. However, you are correct in what you said above it, that there are a lot of grammatical errors. I can accept it; however, I feel like I should ask something first. A lot of the stuff I've seen from you is short, as in one or two lines. If you joined, could you consistently write more than that, or would that be something you would prefer not to do? I apologize if I sound like an ass here, as it is not my intention, and if I'm wrong please set me straight.

Black, I never said revenge wasn't a viable motive. I don't know where you got that from, since it isn't something I meant to convey. What I meant by what I said was that, judging by what you wrote, your writing ability isn't quite up to the standard that I was looking for. I mean no offense by that, and am just trying to clear the meaning up as best I can.

[BlueLight]

I didn't think you were done, Blue, which is why I didn't say anything. The content of it is fine. However, you are correct in what you said above it, that there are a lot of grammatical errors. I can accept it; however, I feel like I should ask something first. A lot of the stuff I've seen from you is short, as in one or two lines. If you joined, could you consistently write more than that, or would that be something you would prefer not to do? I apologize if I sound like an ass here, as it is not my intention, and if I'm wrong please set me straight.

No, it's a valid question. I there is no reason i can't writing long post. I think the only thing recently i've done is really Razor and i try to keep about 3 lines of text at all time but even that can be filler just to have 3 lines of text.
However in reapers dragon RP i was writing for about 5 people paragraphs at least, for each person.

I'd rather have criticism on a draft then wait for the finished product. Right now i know that my character sheet is so far okay expect for the grammar in your eyes so i won't hate to rewrite anything.

[BlueLight]

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Character Sheet:
Name: Sladen
Age: 19
Gender: Male
Appearance:=

Faction: Vespa
Weapon: Butterfly knife & silenced 9mm beretta pistol
Specialization: Infiltration
History: Sladen doesn't talk too much, but when he does, it's a short sarcastic remark. Sladen doesn't take anything seriously, and he does what he does not for self enjoyment, but for revenge. He doesn't have noble intentions, h. His parents were both in Vespa, but they died during a raid. Colonel Brooks was responsible for their deaths, so he joined Vespa to hunt him down and give him a very painful death.

Specialization: Infiltration

I think he was trying to use his specialization before the game started.

[Inferi]

I'd appreciate it if you don't take shots at people on something I made. It isn't funny.

[Inferi]

Alright, since I'm going to be using two characters primarily, I figure it's fair for me to have to make bios for them. So here they are.

Name: Auria Silvandros
Age: 21
Gender: Female

Appearance:

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Faction: Vespa

Weapon: Colt Python as a primary firearm. Auria barely fires the weapon, as doing so means she is in a situation that she is better off running from, but that doesn’t mean she can’t if she needs to. She also uses a great deal of technological devices to give her an edge in most situations.

Specialization: Technology and Infiltration. Auria is the supervising technological member of the Vespa in the New York area.

History:

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Many people would not understand why Auria hates Syris if they knew what her history was. Born into a fairly well-off family, her early life was spent among Syris politicians and military members. Her parents were some of the largest and most wealthy people to support Syris during their initial rise to power, and had managed to keep nearly all of their monetary value even after the stock market collapsed when the war began. Because of this, they were well-respected amongst Syris politicians.

Her life took a turn when she was ten, though. The annual parade to celebrate the end of the war was going on, and her parents had been invited to watch it from a Syris helicopter by friends, a family of Syris politicians that they had known since before Auria was born. Their daughter was the same age as Auria, and the two young girls had known each other since they had been able to recognize other people. The parents had thought it would be fun to give their children an overhead view of something that most could only watch from the ground.

Unfortunately, that parade was a tragedy. An insurgent, thinking irrationally, had taken it upon himself to shoot the helicopter out of the sky and rid the world of some Syris politicians. An RPG aimed at the vehicle had done the job, and the flaming helicopter plummeted earthward, crash-landing on top of a building some fifty feet below it. Through some miracle, Auria wasn’t killed, although everyone else riding the vehicle was. She found rumors later on that her friend might have survived the crash, but then others that said she had died in the hospital from blood loss.

Needless to say, this sparked an irrational fear of riding in helicopters that still plagues her to this day.

While she knew that an insurgent was responsible for the deaths of her parents, something in the young girl’s mind decided that it was the government that was to blame. It was their helicopter and their parade, and they had been the targets. She had just been someone caught in the crossfire. In the end, it was Syris’ fault, not the insurgents.

Auria spent the next several weeks in the hospital, recovering from what had happened. Her injuries had been severe, as several pieces of shrapnel had either embedded themselves in her flesh or torn through her. The most notable was the piece that had severed the muscles in her left shoulder. The doctors managed to stitch it all back together, and she has full functionality, but any movements too sharp will cause it to twinge in pain. Her left eye was also damaged irreparably, but the doctors managed to replace it with a cybernetic one that could do everything the normal one could while still looking the same. The doctors made multiple remarks about how lucky she was to be alive, but she didn’t feel that way.

In any event, the money that she inherited from her parents was enough for her to rent an apartment in New York City and keep it paid for. It was also enough to give her access to some sophisticated computer equipment. Even before her parents’ deaths, she had been a genius when it came to technology, working computers better than most adults employed to do that for a living. That didn’t change as she got older, and she continued to work on various projects, most of them involving anti-Syris websites. The other part of her projects included breaking into the mainframes of various companies and finding out how their various technology worked and how she could work around it.

One of these companies, a high-end contributor to Syris and the SGDF, was of great interest to her, and she probably dug a bit deeper than she should have. For the first time, she wasn’t quite good enough to prevent being caught. Fortunately for her, the person she was caught by was allied with the Vespa, and instead of reporting the break-in to the authorities they sent a Vespa group to go find her. This was due in part to her skill and in part to the anti-Syris work they had found that she had participated in. They were able to do so without too much trouble, and extended an offer that she really couldn’t afford to refuse. They wanted her technical assistance, and her acceptance meant she wouldn’t be reported to the authorities.

Needless to say, she accepted, and over the next several years became one of the best technical experts in North America. Although few Vespa members actually know who she is, her alias among techies, Spirit, is one that is linked to multiple anti-SGDF countermeasures and identity protections that have saved quite a few lives.

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Name: Kristina Pelagius
Age: 21
Gender: Female

Appearance:

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Kristina stands at 5’, 11” tall, with a solid build, the latter due to her military training, mostly. Her hair is black, shoulder length, and her eyes are light blue. They are usually sparking, not literally, but in the sense of emotion, and Kristina usually has a smile on her face to go along with this. She weighs around 157 pounds, any extra weight being made up by muscle, not fat. Despite being solidly built, she is not *big”, but neither can she really be called slim. Everything about her body is perfectly proportioned.

While her body may be perfectly proportioned, Kristina is not perfect by any means. Her skin is white, on the less pale side of the spectrum, and this is slightly disfigured by several scars that she has on her upper body. While most are on the right side of her torso, so unable to be seen in a normal situation, the ones that are visible nearly all the time are on her face. She has one that stretches from the outer side of her left eye to her left ear, and another that is on her right cheek, reaching about halfway from her jawbone to her eye. Lastly, she has one on the right side of her neck, that is a several inches long, and many people have wondered how she managed to survive whatever had given it to her. Kristina cannot remember how she got any of these, so she surmises that it happened when she ended up in the hospital.

One of the other things that Kristina different is her right arm. The entire arm, from shoulder down to hand, is synthetic, made by what she was told was cutting-edge medical technology, even for this day and age. Apparently it was made from organ cloning, as they could not make a synthetic arm that would grow with her. It took effort to reattach all of the muscles and nerves, and even though the feeling in it is not as strong as a normal one it is still enough for her to know that the arm is completely real.

That hand, on the other hand, is made of a synthetic material. Due to complications in the cloned hand, it had to be removed when she turned eighteen, and a hand of synthetic material had to be attached for her to remain in the military. It is more resistant to heat and electricity than a normal hand and is made of a harder material, although it can still take damage. Nerve endings were attached to sensors in the hand, so she can feel with it about the same as she can with her normal hand.

Faction: SGDF

Weapon: Sterling Adaptive Combat Rifle – Kristina’s rifle carries all of the typical features, and is also modified to fire a Ring Airfoil Projectile. As she prefers to keep everyone alive that she can, Kristina uses these unless the situation specifically warrants the use of lethal weapons. The projectiles will detonate on impact, releasing a concussive force that is sufficient to both knock down and disorient her target. In situations that warrant lethal fire, the magazine is simply changed to something more along those lines.

She also carried a Sterling-manufactured handgun, derived from the design of the Five-seveN, for situations such as building clears. In situations where melee is prevalent, Kristina uses only her fists, which are enhanced by the suit that she wears. It is specially made to increase the power of her physical strikes and decrease melee damage done to her. It is also slightly more effective at stopping projectiles, and designed to support her as she leads the squad through a dangerous situation.

Specialization: Pilot of anything that can fly, as well as a well-regarded strike team leader.

History:

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Kristina’s early history is a mystery, even to her. She remembers nothing before she was twelve years old. Her first memory is waking up in a hospital, with doctors crowded around her bed. That memory lasted a total of five seconds, before she blacked out again. It happened several more times, and each time the view looked different, as if she was being moved.

When she finally woke up for good, it was in the same place she had woken up the first time. Even this part of her history is a blur. She can remember the doctors speaking to her, telling her how she had been in and out of consciousness for two years as they attempted to save her life. Apparently, she had been the victim of some kind of attack, and had almost died from it. It was because of this that she had a synthetic arm, as well as the multiple scars on her face. She had also lost her memory because of this. Mental trauma, they told her, and she saw no reason to doubt them. She could remember everything basic, like how to talk, the words themselves, etc, but nothing about herself, her life, or the world.

From then on, she became a ward of the state, and one year later, when she was thirteen, was adopted by Aaron Pelagius, a high-ranking official of the SGDF. As she had no name that she could remember, and none recorded, he decided to name her Kristina after his late wife. It was a name that she liked, and so from them on she was known as Kristina Pelagius. She moved into the Pelagius house, a large mansion several miles outside of New York City, and although it was just her and her father in it she didn’t feel all that alone. The large rooms had a feeling of freedom to them that she enjoyed, even as she grew through her teenage years.

Barely a year after she moved in, Kristina began showing an interest in flying. Even at a young age, and without a real ability to control, she showed an enthusiasm that made her adoptive father laugh on multiple occasions when he found her sitting in the helicopter sitting on the roof pad, moving everything like she was actually flying the machine. As soon as she was old enough to be able to exert accurate control over everything, he gave her lessons in flying, and she quickly grasped the concepts, becoming a licensed pilot by the age of seventeen.

It may have been because of him adopting her that she ended up joining the military at age sixteen, two years earlier than she was supposed to, and it may have been one of the reasons she rose in rank so quickly as well. However, once she was there, very few doubted that Kristina was suited for the job. She was a good leader, and she made smart decisions. Unable to pair her with a specific strike team, the SGDF moved her around to wherever she fit best, and so in the last year she hasn’t had the time to form much of a bond with anyone that she worked with.

During her military service, her skills in piloting moved on to encompass planes and VTOLs, although her preference has always been helicopters.

[Reaver]

wow seven people so far. This is gonna be fun to watch! Shame there isn't any bad guy PCs in this Rp.

[Icaelus]

*Poke* Could always use a serial murderer, Reaves :3.

[Reaver]

Nah I don't want to waste my one of my new evil characters. I'm saving her for a more "equalistic" Rp in which the bad guys stand a chance. Plus this just isn't my bottle of rum. Besides Im sure Inferi can try make up some really evil, backstabbing, hope-crushing, chaos causing, asshole of a person Npc to take my place. However I highly doubt it will be as evil as my usual people So everyone is safe from my raping this once! Enjoy it!

[13Lack12ose]

Black, I never said revenge wasn't a viable motive. I don't know where you got that from, since it isn't something I meant to convey. What I meant by what I said was that, judging by what you wrote, your writing ability isn't quite up to the standard that I was looking for. I mean no offense by that, and am just trying to clear the meaning up as best I can.

Well I honestly wanted to roleplay as a bit of a madman, someone who wasn't quite in his right mind, and you shot down both of my attempts to make that a reality, both of which had revenge as a motive.
And you still haven't specified what it is about me or my characters that you don't like, you're just saying abstract things that I can't really work with.
In regards to my writing ability, I can't really see anything wrong with it, other than that random "h" at the end of one of my sentences, which is clearly a typo.

[Inferi]

And again, I apologize but I can't accept someone classified as a madman, especially when the motive is revenge on the people that the group is supposed to be tactically evading.

Everyone, sorry that I haven't put up an IC thread yet. I've been busy with a wake and funeral for the past few days while trying to fight off being sick. I'm still working on it, and I'll try to get it up as soon as I can.

[Thaedael]

You never did make a comment/response to my aside about having someone not right in the head. Can you look that over, and see if what's his face above can use it?

[Inferi]

While it goes against my own personal logic to have someone that's "mad", I suppose I'm not being fair if I don't ask this: How "mad" is he, exactly? Can you describe how he would act in a situation where Syris troops are present?

Contrary to what I said until now, I am willing to give it a shot, but I need to know that he would actually fit under the "acceptable" category first.

Oh, and when I was talking about writing ability, I was referring to the fact that there is almost nothing to the bio. I do not consider the bio very good because of the extreme lack of detail, and I would like it if you could add to it if I decide that he would be acceptable.

[Zender_Solarheart]

Name: Jonathan "Jon" Edge.
Age: 25.
Gender: Male.
Appearance: Something like this, but with a cybernetic left arm. Also, I know that's Guy from Tales of the Abyss; I'm using this to show you what he looks like physically, that's all.

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Faction: SGDF, rank Lieutenant.
Weapons:
-Primary = AR6K "Razor" assault rifle.

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A smaller, lighter variant of the AR6 series, the Razor is built more for urban defense or shock trooper ops, as opposed to open-field combat. Its firepower has been carefully adjusted to where it can pierce a police-standard bulletproof vest, but won't go busting through the wall of a building unless fired within 1 foot of said wall. In short, it's a weapon Jon would use if he was deep in an enemy facility, with civilians too close for higher-caliber weaponry. Its main drawback is the lower accuracy, which becomes even worse with a silencer; this often restricts it to roles of suppressing fire, or when he needs to drop multiple targets at close range, in a short expanse of time.

-Secondary = SMAG39 silenced auto-pistol, nicknamed "Queen of Hearts" by Jon.

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The SMAG39 is built much like your average .357 magnum pistol, but designed a bit more for the sake of discretion than pure power output. The rounds have been re-designed for use with a silencer - often used with this weapon - and Jon himself often relies on it to eliminate targets at ranges that his Razor rifle would prove inefficient at. While still quite strong over medium or mid-long range, the pistol is absolutely devastating at close range, due to its magnum-based design; to quote Dirty Harry: "You've got to ask yourself one question: 'do I feel lucky?' Well, do ya, punk?"

-Melee = Stun rod. Nothing real special, just your average zappy-stick for non-lethal whoopings of the ass.

Specialization: None in particular. Jon's one of those guys who prefers a balanced skill-set, and who adapts to the situation at-hand as it unfolds.
History:

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While his own current accomplishments are nowhere near as grand, Jon comes from a long line of war-heroes. Jered Edge was a lesser-known veteran from before Syris started getting big, and his grandson, Joseph Edge, was an accomplished joint-field operative during the Unification War. Despite this, however, Jon was raised by an indie game software developer (James Edge, his father), and an accomplished painter and writer (Jane Edge, his mother), meaning his only real knowledge on combat was derived from video games. Most of those games were made by his father, though his twin sister, Jillian Edge, occasionally snuck in a few JRPGs without their dad knowing.

One day, Jon was out walking with Jill, wanting to visit a new arcade that had opened recently, when she decided to take a "shortcut" through a back alley. They were both young at the time - only 9 years old - and had often traveled the city's more common roads, so they knew little of the types that lurked in such places. Needless to say, they found out rather quickly. A trio of men dressed in dark clothing and black denim jackets strolled up to them, and said if they walked into a certain building with them, they'd find a room with "a lifetime supply of candy." Jill took the bait, and dragged Jon along with her into the building...where 4 more thugs were waiting for them. Obviously, this was one big kidnapping trap, with the intent of training Jill for an underground sex slave market. As someone who they couldn't train for that market even if they wanted to, Jon was extra baggage, and two men stepped forward to dispose of him as such...

...and then, it happened.

Without warning or hesitation, Jon sprang into action, kicking one thug in the wrist to make him drop his bludgeon, and using it to trip up the second thug with a strike at the back of his right knee. No one's sure how he pulled this off, but Jon himself believes his "warrior's heritage was awakened" at that point. He then used the second thug's chain weapon to sweep a third one off his feet as well, grabbed Jill, and ran off with her. The thugs gave chase, but luckily enough, a nearby SGDF officer heard the incident unfolding from a cracked open window, and moved in to rescue them. A few stun-gun shots later, and the situation was taken care of...mostly.

In all the chaos of the event, Jon had somehow lost track of Jill. His eyes were trained forward during their escape run, and in the adrenaline rush, he failed to notice when her hand left his own. Even to this day, Jillian Edge's whereabouts remain unknown...but Jon hasn't given up. Having seen their operatives' skills first-hand, he wasted no time in signing up with them, practically blitzed through basic training, and quickly climbed the ranks to Lieutenant. It seems his days of playing Jet Force Scorpio, Star Fox Battalion, and Ace Frontier Zero XX gave him some background knowledge on some decent battle tactics, which gave him a sort of head-start on his fellow cadets.

While he retains focus on protecting the people and peace in general, Jon has not forgotten the day his sister vanished, and seeks information on her whenever feasible. His own parents may have submitted to the belief that she's dead, but he refuses to do so. Unless he sees her corpse first-hand, Jon will always believe that Jillian Edge is still alive somewhere, waiting for him to come and save her.

[Inferi]

Looks good to me, Zender.

Right, I'm not accepting anyone else now. I've got enough of a crowd. Black, you are the exception if you wish to make your bio acceptable, since it is already there.

[Inferi]

IC thread is up!

[BlueLight]

if i'm taking up room then im willing to give up my spot for him.

[13Lack12ose]

While it goes against my own personal logic to have someone that's "mad", I suppose I'm not being fair if I don't ask this: How "mad" is he, exactly? Can you describe how he would act in a situation where Syris troops are present?

Contrary to what I said until now, I am willing to give it a shot, but I need to know that he would actually fit under the "acceptable" category first.

Oh, and when I was talking about writing ability, I was referring to the fact that there is almost nothing to the bio. I do not consider the bio very good because of the extreme lack of detail, and I would like it if you could add to it if I decide that he would be acceptable.

If Syris troops were present and one of them was the man he was after, he would probably try and kill him. If the guy he was after wasn't among them, he'd just let them go by.
I wanted my character to have a bit of depth instead of just being "Evade, sabotage, evade, etc."

And ya, I'll add some stuff to my bio.

[Grape Me]

Did blue give up their spot?