Art Critique Corner

[noox]

Hello fellow aspiring artists, want-to-be artists, or solo devs looking to improve artwork, I made this thread so I can help those create their artwork relatively better. All I'll be doing is doing edits to a person's work, explaining what they can improve on, and providing additional feedback. Anything from drawing to animating, I'm up for doing some critiques. I'll do these during my spare time though.