Need a Brony Pre-Reader

[Kuragari]

I'm working on the next chapter of my fanfic, A Jewel of a Problem, but I'm wanting someone to look over what I've got and tell me if there's anything they think could be messed with to sound better or say be more fitting in line with the characters from the show. Since my Co-Author who had been such a big help and I had a falling out, I haven't been entirely sure of the work I've put into it.

[BinaryHedgehog]

Sure, I'll give it a shot!